Summer Barriers [another screened challenge]

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Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2003-09-09 08:00 PM

Summer Barriers [another screened challenge]

They said it was only
To keep out flies and mosquitoes
But it didn’t keep out summer
Unless it rained

And if you hugged the window sill
Tight
When it rained
With the window in slight open
Cool air mixed with metal and dust

…

You played with ideas
When you looked out into the gray
Wandering off, as you did
Without getting wet, and all

And there was a time
Or two
That I melted through the mesh,
Myself, when I wasn’t counting
The holes of it,
Trying to see beyond, to where you hid
In the gray

And sometimes, the smallest spiders
Watched you leave
Keeping me company
Until my sigh
Made them shudder,
And scurry.

Remember?

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now

1 posted 2003-09-09 08:10 PM

Sunshine - most beautiful verse you write...

BC

QjQ
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2 posted 2003-09-09 08:39 PM

oh my your penning always brightens my darkest days,

garysgirl

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3 posted 2003-09-10 09:56 AM

Sunshine, you met the challenge
perfectly...as always.

Hugs

Ethel

James_A_Fraser
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4 posted 2003-09-10 10:23 AM

"You played with ideas
When you looked out into the gray
Wandering off, as you did
Without getting wet, and all"

At the time, I thought I was the only one in the world who ever did this. It's good to know now that there were more of us, and to know who some of them are now, what they became.

scorpio
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right...there

5 posted 2003-09-10 10:26 AM

Been there and done that...thank you for taking me back in time..

believe in what your heart feels...

EvocativeVerse2
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6 posted 2003-09-10 10:30 AM

Well done...desriptive and sweet. It was the title that pulled me in to read this. It intrigued me...what could the Summmer Barriers be? And then after reading the last line I said...yes...yes...yes. You took me to where immagination would not have led without your guidance. Thank-you Sunshine. Wonderful verse!

Sunnyone
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7 posted 2003-09-10 11:42 AM

Makes me want to go do some windowsill daydreaming, as the rain pours down today!! Oh, Sun-sis, you always take my mind on a journey to new places!!!! ~S~

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart ~~S~~

kayjay
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8 posted 2003-09-10 11:56 AM

If you ever wish, you can change your name of "Sunshine" to Phrasemaker...lol Well done. KJ

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

SmartChick
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9 posted 2003-09-10 12:08 PM

Beautiful, Karilea.

Martie

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10 posted 2003-09-10 01:18 PM

I remember the screen on my childhood dormer window...and the dust left on my nose pressing against it with my daydream. Thank you for this memory, Karilea.

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

11 posted 2003-09-10 01:20 PM

Wonderful Karilea!
and yes...I remember!
~Hugs YOU!~

~ Summer can't be over...
I still have sand in my shoes ~

Cpat Hair

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12 posted 2003-09-10 01:33 PM

(chuckling) Task master indeed! Look what you did!!!!

very nicely done K..

Dark Angel
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13 posted 2003-09-10 05:36 PM

And sometimes, the smallest spiders
Watched you leave
Keeping me company
Until my sigh
Made them shudder,
And scurry.

Remember?

Love this...love it all Karilea.

Smiling here.

M

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

SPUD
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14 posted 2003-09-10 05:52 PM

Your poem has such charm and is very pretty.

vandana

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15 posted 2003-09-10 07:33 PM

nice write

El_Campeador
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16 posted 2003-09-11 08:31 AM

Karilea, you play with ideas in the most wonderful way. Thank you for another painting of words!

“We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson

Krawdad
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17 posted 2003-09-11 08:00 PM

The rain, the dust, the old rusty screen . . .
thanks for the recollection.

LngJhnAg
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Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

18 posted 2003-09-12 03:11 PM

Beautiful, Karilea - and deserving of a response, coming forthwith.

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