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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ Lowering the sails, reluctantly circling around a safe harbor remembering you in a slip of time . As the darkness drapes the sun with subtle undertones rocking on the horizon in a quiet lull stringing stars across an island in my mind. Where the tide gathers and pulls leaves me shivering in the shimmer tearful and glassy eyed. Silhouetted behind the moonlight hidden from the glowing cooled by the trade winds that carry in the breeze. So like the songs we used to play are always there to remind me running together in watercolors. Painted like a picture postcard I meant to send I wish I could go back and take you there casting away for a month of sun days. But it seems I've lost all sense of direction and the water is too rough to weather the mysteries when the sea is storming inside of me. Can we ever go back,I don't know, I don't know but I'm holding onto to my hope, without a doubt I would chase the wind for to be with you. ~If I haven't lost you already~ |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
Silhouetted behind the moonlight hidden from the glowing cooled by the trade winds that carry in the breeze very impressive lines,, written well,, lady poetress |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Very sweet, and heartfelt...Lovely quiet pleas.  SharaRose @-->-- Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Yes! Classic Blues for a Friday evening! You do costlines -- of the world and of the heart -- better than anybody. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, this made me cry because love hopes all things and love wishes all things and I hold this notion to my heart as I have never felt true love yet and I believe for you and all the wonderful deserving souls out there, good things will come to all those who wait patiently! (sigh) This is very heartfelt, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
This is exactly what I needed. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Bluesy . . . ok this about done me in . . . Can we ever go back,I don't know, I don't know but I'm holding onto to my hope, without a doubt I would chase the wind for to be with you. ~If I haven't lost you already~ ahhh . . . beautiful heart you have there keep singing for me . . . tweets xxoo |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Lowering the sails, reluctantly circling around a safe harbor remembering you in a slip of time . Lori, you had me aching with the first lines and throughout. why does missing someone have to hurt this much? when you know you can't or don't want to let go of them. Into my library. Much love n hugs. xxx Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I would chase the wind for to be with you. lovely line, Lori hugssss to you M |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
As the darkness drapes the sun with subtle undertones rocking on the horizon in a quiet lull stringing stars across an island in my mind. Where the tide gathers and pulls leaves me shivering in the shimmer tearful and glassy eyed. Silhouetted behind the moonlight hidden from the glowing cooled by the trade winds that carry in the breeze. So like the songs we used to play are always there to remind me running together in watercolors. Painted like a picture postcard I meant to send I wish I could go back and take you there casting away for a month of sun days. ========================= I actually read this late last night before going to bed...but was too tired to type a reply that would do it justice..but taking these lovely images to bed with me made for a lullaby of waves.  When the ocean is your muse...your writing is at its finest. Love this bittersweet beauty wrapped in blue. superb write Lorie-girl  When was the last time you felt this high, |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori There is much beauty in the oceans of your heart you give with your words. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Oh Lori, I love the way you wrote this. One of the many lines I love is.... leaves me shivering in the shimmers There are many more. I'll be back to this many times, sweet lady. I just love it.  Hugs Ethel |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I love how your poetic mind--and soul--expresses itself! Your poetry always touches me in some way. The ink flows directly from your heart. Linda |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
This is a true BluesSerenade. Lovely to read. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Good grief Bluesy! You finished it! This is probably one of my favorites of yours, and to think you said, I don't care for it, just something I am scribbling tonight!" Proves the old theory that just because you don't like it, perhaps we will I loved this completed and kept it, it is sure a "keeper." |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a sad aching touch....but I love that feeling |
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