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Making It Look Easy |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows 
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You walked into the showcase in your new black label suit, $2000.00 worth of Lauren I could crumple in a ball, simple pearls and diamonds your own blended oil scent edgy Gucci try-to-do-me heels gave you just the height to use, all night long; you pulled at heartstrings your targets didn't even know were so exposed, would never think were within your reach, and there for you to pull; your laughter like the song bird sings to bring the men like leaves, tumbling behind you in a swirl, shopping always shopping draw them in sort them out and swat the culls away; the castoffs always look like they don't know what just went on, bewildered and defeated they didn't even get to play. You are the perfect female predator today, the center of your world. ©2003 by icebox |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
icebox I have never known a woman like this...although I'm sure they exist. Seems selfish, but wondering if all that glitz could be a disguise for a scared little girl. You painted her very real. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
As usual..perfect imagery and I pictured the woman easily... Wonderful write and very much enjoyed! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~ Summer can't be over... |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
So when did you first meet my ex-wife?????  Again, your painting is exact. I find myself humming "Always a Woman" to this one. Excellent work, sir.... |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
"simple pearls and diamonds your own blended oil scent edgy Gucci try-to-do-me heels" Do those kind of heels sell at Walmart?  Great write. |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Kaoru, maybe Mallmart. Great write, Icy, I like the hissssss, in it! ~K~ |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Nice poem. Visions are clear! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is an excellent write, as usual - I'm with Martie on the reality of this one though, The facade is an interesting one - yet the woman you describe rarely maintains a loving relationship. She usually knows only how to paint an inviting picture - Perhaps that's why she's constantly moving on... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
bewildered and defeated they didn't even get to play. You are the perfect female predator today, the center of your world. a little harsh..but I have seen one or two like that... nicely done M |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Icy~ This women, or picture of, goes to the extreme and I am sure there are some like her... But let me admit, I have purposely dressed and/or acted in a certain way to get the attention of ALL men in the room...when it works it is the best ego booster in the world...and sometimes I needed it... I feel better now...lol Susan |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
...but I like playing dress-up! lol   EA |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Iceman, this type woman doesn't care about anyone but herself. And, she knows exactly what she's doing at all times....and doesn't care. This type person is so sad to me.  Hugs to you, Sir Poet Ethel |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You are the perfect female predator today, the center of your world. I know some of these creatures... and while it seems harsh, I don't even care what made them this way... they leave too much misery in their wake. Excellent depiction! |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
A great write into the site of a very bitter,scared, and unloved woman.She reaks destruction and one day will surmise her own.Well penned here my friend. Crystal |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Wow, do I ever know that one! Know her wearing three or four different faces, in fact, and one of her incarnations is even a passable poet, among other more obvious talents..... If I may be so crass as to say so, you really nailed her with this (though not, I suspect, with anything else)..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Gina Culliney Member
since 2003-03-08
Posts 170 |
mmmmmmmmm Mount kill men a jared oh! ouch! one great write of look but ya can't have it! |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Sigh. I want to BE that woman! I do! But I'm the dumpy little lady in the corner that all the losers come and pour their hearts out to. Sigh again. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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