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Equal Shades |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ What seems like an eternity has been only a few days where time paces in the shadows haunted by my own words as are the seeds that we have sewn and I wonder what you're thinking. Like a newly potted plant that was taking place in bloom I am lilting on my own without the sun on my face. Perhaps I shall move down the steps but I fear putting myself out there in case it makes no difference staring down an empty sidewalk that is filled with quiet sounds and trepidation. I miss you and the laughter that we shared when I conjure up the time it spans in all directions and surrounds the daylight in equal shades. I feel you there at the edges of my smile like a single bloom that I've been missing all my life and so I remain in the same place to wait and watch, until then. ~*~ |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I feel you there at the edges of my smile love that line..a beautiful poem, Lori. hugs M |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
Great write.... Been wondering where you were. Tima |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
I feel you there at the edges of my smile like a single bloom that I've been missing all my life and so I remain in the same place to wait and watch, until then. Sooooo good to read you Lori.  this is beautiful, hauntingly so. You have so much care and compassion, it shines through your every word lady.  Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you for liking my favorite lines too. Love ya Maur~ Tima~ Thank you sweet lady~ gemma, gemma~ I thank you sincerely for your warm reply. hugs you guys~ |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
and so I remain in the same place to wait and watch, until then. too much waiting....i want it now anyhow, good words as always, yellow canary |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I miss you and the laughter that we shared when I conjure up the time it spans in all directions and surrounds the daylight in equal shades. I feel you there at the edges of my smile like a single bloom that I've been missing all my life and so I remain in the same place to wait and watch, until then. Lori, this is beautiful, with such yearning written in it. Just beautiful!!  Hugs  Ethel |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
There's something about the way you say things -- painting your images with equal parts of sight and emotion...... when I manage to do that and make it work, I know I'm a poet. You do it every time. Visions like these..... "I feel you there at the edges of my smile " "...staring down an empty sidewalk that is filled with quiet sounds and trepidation...." Just excellent! This is the fourth time I've visited this poem since you posted it -- think I'll just library it, so I don't have to search next time. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Lori... i'm actually speechless. the images here made me both smile and sigh. I felt like you took a glimpse of my own heart and soul. However, you wrote it much more beautifully than I ever could. Great write sweet lady! Take care. Amy "love is like a butterfly-- |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ohh Bluesy, no matter how hard you try this will never occur, trust me I am lilting on my own without the sun on my face. Beautiful writing as always tweets xxoo |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori...You are a beautiful flower....and poet! |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"I feel you there at the edges of my smile like a single bloom that I've been missing all my life and so I remain in the same place to wait and watch, until then." yep, the end did it for me too....love this part.... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"I feel you there at the edges of my smile like a single bloom that I've been missing all my life" ~ only you, Dear Bluesy One! Very expressive! EA |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BluesSerenade~ Such lovely thoughts~ 'I miss you and the laughter that we shared when I conjure up the time it spans in all directions and surrounds the daylight in equal shades. I feel you there at the edges of my smile like a single bloom that I've been missing all my life and so I remain in the same place to wait and watch, until then.' So enjoyable~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
As always you bring my emotions rushing out of their little hiding places drawn to the light of your words then I have to round them up and drive them like a herd back into the shadows where they are safe where they belong. I guess it is good exercise for all of me. *smile* Thank you for sharing this poem here. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You know Bluesy - I am not sure that there is anyone that does emotion in poetry as well as you do - and once again, it conjured up some serious, "ahhh" in me. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"I feel you there at the edges of my smile like a single bloom that I've been missing all my life and so I remain in the same place to wait and watch, until then." Bluesy~this was amazing..I truly felt it. Susan |
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