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BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

0 posted 2003-08-29 10:10 PM

~*~

What seems like an eternity
has been only a few days
where time paces in the shadows
haunted by my own words
as are the seeds that we have sewn
and I wonder what you're thinking.

Like a newly potted plant
that was taking place in bloom
I am lilting on my own
without the sun on my face.

Perhaps I shall move down the steps
but I fear putting myself out there
in case it makes no difference
staring down an empty sidewalk
that is filled with quiet sounds and trepidation.

I miss you and the laughter that we shared
when I conjure up the time
it spans in all directions
and surrounds the daylight in equal shades.

I feel you there at the edges of my smile
like a single bloom
that I've been missing all my life
and so I remain in the same place
to wait and watch, until then.

~*~

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

1 posted 2003-08-29 10:13 PM

I feel you there at the edges of my smile

love that line..a beautiful poem, Lori.

hugs
M

timothysangel1973

Senior Member

since 2001-12-03

Posts 1725
Never close enough

2 posted 2003-08-29 10:15 PM

Great write....

Been wondering where you were.

Tima

gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

3 posted 2003-08-30 07:15 AM

I feel you there at the edges of my smile
like a single bloom
that I've been missing all my life
and so I remain in the same place
to wait and watch, until then.

Sooooo good to read you Lori.

this is beautiful, hauntingly so. You have so much care and compassion, it shines through your every word lady.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

4 posted 2003-08-30 02:55 PM

Thank you for liking my favorite lines too.
Love ya Maur~

Tima~ Thank you sweet lady~

gemma, gemma~ I thank you sincerely for your warm reply.

hugs you guys~

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

5 posted 2003-08-30 10:46 PM

and so I remain in the same place
to wait and watch, until then.

too much waiting....i want it now
anyhow, good words as always, yellow canary

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

6 posted 2003-08-30 10:56 PM

I miss you and the laughter that we shared
when I conjure up the time
it spans in all directions
and surrounds the daylight in equal shades.

I feel you there at the edges of my smile
like a single bloom
that I've been missing all my life
and so I remain in the same place
to wait and watch, until then.

Lori, this is beautiful, with such yearning
written in it. Just beautiful!!

Hugs

Ethel

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

7 posted 2003-08-31 11:29 AM

There's something about the way you say things -- painting your images with equal parts of sight and emotion...... when I manage to do that and make it work, I know I'm a poet. You do it every time.

Visions like these.....

"I feel you there at the edges of my smile "

"...staring down an empty sidewalk
that is filled with quiet sounds and trepidation...."

Just excellent! This is the fourth time I've visited this poem since you posted it -- think I'll just library it, so I don't have to search next time.

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Aimster
Member Elite

since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

8 posted 2003-08-31 05:08 PM

Lori...

i'm actually speechless. the images
here made me both smile and sigh. I
felt like you took a glimpse of my own
heart and soul. However, you wrote it
much more beautifully than I ever could.
Great write sweet lady!
Take care.
Amy

"love is like a butterfly--
if you chase it,
it will surely fly away,instead
hold it close and watch it grow into
something beautiful"
~me~

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

9 posted 2003-08-31 06:58 PM

Ohh Bluesy, no matter how hard you try
this will never occur, trust me

I am lilting on my own
without the sun on my face.

Beautiful writing
as always
tweets
xxoo

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

10 posted 2003-08-31 08:43 PM

Lori...You are a beautiful flower....and poet!

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

11 posted 2003-09-01 12:39 PM

"I feel you there at the edges of my smile
like a single bloom
that I've been missing all my life
and so I remain in the same place
to wait and watch, until then."

yep, the end did it for me too....love this part....

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

12 posted 2003-09-01 10:22 AM

"I feel you there at the edges of my smile
like a single bloom
that I've been missing all my life"

~ only you, Dear Bluesy One! Very expressive!

EA

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

13 posted 2003-09-01 11:14 AM

BluesSerenade~
Such lovely thoughts~

'I miss you and the laughter that we shared
when I conjure up the time
it spans in all directions
and surrounds the daylight in equal shades.

I feel you there at the edges of my smile
like a single bloom
that I've been missing all my life
and so I remain in the same place
to wait and watch, until then.'

So enjoyable~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
noles1@totcon.com

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

14 posted 2003-09-01 11:23 AM

As always
you bring my emotions rushing out of their little hiding places
drawn to the light of your words
then I have to round them up and drive them like a herd
back into the shadows where they are safe
where they belong.

I guess it is good exercise
for all of me.

*smile*

Thank you for sharing this poem here.

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

15 posted 2003-09-01 12:47 PM

You know Bluesy - I am not sure that there is anyone that does emotion in poetry as well as you do - and once again, it conjured up some serious, "ahhh" in me.

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

16 posted 2003-09-01 02:04 PM

"I feel you there at the edges of my smile
like a single bloom
that I've been missing all my life
and so I remain in the same place
to wait and watch, until then."

Bluesy~this was amazing..I truly felt it.

Susan

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