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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Incline I can still feel the bench, the curve is hard. I know it is planted in the park and one day in winter the rain will change it. It strains now on the incline, holding the hilltop. Will erosion one day take a leg and leave it hanging onto air? Lovers have filled themselves on it’s sloped wood, in between the movement of day a hand has briefly balanced the heft of skin, then moved down to warm begin of kiss that lingers even now in the curve where initials have been carved. Will they forever be so profound? And will there be time before the coming of the chill to stay bare armed into the evening, still holding on to slip of sun in wait of dark? With love the good cold dirt is alive and seeping seed. I hear it. It makes me hungry for the change of season. Where will fall be raked when across the path the trees loose their gowns? Will it be stark and true and show us seasons only love renews with a blanket? For now the bench is slanted on the hill, staying as if life around is all that moves, yet still I know that one day in winter the rain will change it. |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Very lovely description of the bench through the changing seasons and people who visited it..thank you for the words...i too write on a bench in a park and observe the seasons... Goldenrose |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You know how I feel about benches... you inherently knows what this means to me... |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Martie...this is beautiful in so many ways. I absolutely love it...and love YOU.  "My friends are my estate." |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh Martie, I love that ending |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
a hand has briefly balanced the heft of skin, then moved down to warm begin of kiss that lingers even now in the curve where initials have been carved. Will they forever be so profound? And will there be time before the coming of the chill to stay bare armed into the evening, still holding on to slip of sun in wait of dark? With love the good cold dirt is alive and seeping seed. I hear it. It makes me hungry for the change of season. Where will fall be raked when across the path the trees loose their gowns? Will it be stark and true and show us seasons only love renews with a blanket? For now the bench is slanted on the hill, staying as if life around is all that moves, yet still I know that one day in winter the rain will change it. ========================= funny you should mention profound... And will there be time before the coming of the chill to stay bare armed into the evening, still holding on to slip of sun in wait of dark? Where will fall be raked when across the path the trees loose their gowns? yes..........you are ....profound  You're going to hear my voice in the morning calling your name ... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Where will fall be raked when across the path the trees loose their gowns? Will it be stark and true and show us seasons only love renews with a blanket? you are so good at this, Martie...I can picture it in my mind...and even see the initial carvings M |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Martie, this is so beautiful.You let us see images as if we were right there.You have a talent that is deeply within you my friend  Crystal |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
With love the good cold dirt is alive and seeping seed. I hear it. It makes me hungry for the change of season. Where will fall be raked when across the path the trees loose their gowns? Will it be stark and true and show us seasons only love renews with a blanket? wistful wish for an ideal..for a change of clime perhaps and all tied to the things now in incline..some will slide down the hill, some will weather the season, but none will be the same. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetSis~ Read this three times ... replied, but the cyber-monster must have eaten it~ Back for another helping~ 'Where will fall be raked when across the path the trees loose their gowns?' GORGEOUS ! You are soooooo outstanding~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
That's the best kind of park bench...with a little slope to it, and lovers' initials cut into the wood. In fact, maybe that's the only real kind. You certainly make this one feel that way! Another ride on Martie's magic carpet....and what a beautiful view.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
My, My, My That you do this at all is a wonder That you do it repeatedly is a gift This bench stands immortal! Damn! and Damn! again Ed |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Where will fall be raked when across the path the trees loose their gowns? Will it be stark and true and show us seasons only love renews with a blanket? Martie, Martie, so special this is!  |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Lovers have filled themselves on it’s sloped wood, in between the movement of day a hand has briefly balanced the heft of skin, then moved down to warm begin of kiss that lingers even now in the curve where initials have been carved. Will they forever be so profound? This is so beautiful, Martie.  Hugs Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (08-30-2003 02:18 PM).] |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Simply beautiful writing.. |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
she always finds the interesting angle |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
love it...simply beautiful...:-) >>>>ice<<<< |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Martie...Lovely thoughts and words done in that special way only you can do. Really liked the following...Paul Where will fall be raked when across the path the trees loose their gowns? Will it be stark and true and show us seasons only love renews with a blanket? "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Oh Martie, this is beautiful, sweet friend, this made me smile because I love the park so much and can just imagine sitting with my dream girl on one of those benches in the future together! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Still got your classic touch....I can see that bench sitting there, waiting for the erosion to one day take it away from it's place in romantic history.....are your initials there? I forgot my penknife.. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
ah how I loved the visit to this bench and all it has to say - how well you say and paint it - Paul |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Very beautiful Martie. :-) Ribbit |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
very beatiful.....sigh |
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