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Susan Caldwell
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0 posted 2003-08-29 10:57 AM



Chapter 2~Rules

I wouldn’t have ever guessed
That you would have the power
To make me forget
My own rules

The first rule I broke
Happened on a lunch hour
That turned into three
You back in my life a mere five days

Yet I didn’t feel bad
About what I had done
It was the best lunch
I had ever had

At that time I still felt safe
Safe because I knew you
Safe because I knew myself
I was just having fun

And didn’t have a clue
How wrong something can go
When you’re lied to and
When you lie to yourself


© Copyright 2003 Susan Caldwell - All Rights Reserved
angelblueyes
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1 posted 2003-08-29 11:02 AM


I so hear you in these words.The realization that doesn't seem to come until later.Nicely done.
Crystal

Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2003-08-29 11:02 AM


Susan,
Alot of ouch poems this morning, enjoyed.

Susan Caldwell
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3 posted 2003-08-29 11:06 AM


Crystal-Thank you!  

Sy-hmmmm...blue friday? But thank you for reading!

Susan

LeeJ
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4 posted 2003-08-29 11:09 AM


I have to wonder sometimes what could they be thinking when they do this....I'm right there with ya...or was...at one time not to long ago...God bless and thank you for another great write.
Opeth
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5 posted 2003-08-29 11:10 AM


The bastard!

Excellent story telling, interesting, indeed.

So, there may be a 3rd chapter?

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6 posted 2003-08-29 11:12 AM


And didn’t have a clue
How wrong something can go
When you’re lied to and
When you lie to yourself


maybe we should form a support group...compare notes..bet they would allbe very similar...


enjoying this process

M

Susan Caldwell
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7 posted 2003-08-29 11:18 AM


LeeJ-Sometimes we all do things without thinking...Thank you for reading!

Mike-Maybe the male character is, but I think there were mistakes on both sides...but I guess you will have to keep reading...there are 11 "chapters"...

M-Compare notes..indeed...they would be similar at the very least...



Susan

Opeth
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8 posted 2003-08-29 11:22 AM


Susan, not many people who come from broken relationships take part of the blame themselves - at least from my experience, that is - and I think that shows class.
Susan Caldwell
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9 posted 2003-08-29 11:32 AM


Mike-

First, lol, please look at these as "fiction" too scary any other way...but yes, I think there is always two sides...But I won't go into Susan's lame beliefs on my happy pages of Blue!!!  LOL

Susan

Bill Charles
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10 posted 2003-08-29 05:02 PM


Susan - I had to reply to this one also. A continuation of it all...

BC

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11 posted 2003-08-29 05:06 PM


and now... chapter 3?????



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12 posted 2003-08-29 08:00 PM


"And didn’t have a clue
How wrong something can go
When you’re lied to and
When you lie to yourself"


Beautiful!!!

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13 posted 2003-08-29 08:31 PM


At that time I still felt safe
Safe because I knew you
Safe because I knew myself
I was just having fun

And didn’t have a clue
How wrong something can go
When you’re lied to and
When you lie to yourself



Susan, I'm loving these...now where's chapter 3??
Hugs to you  
Ethel

Oh, and in the other thread I was just kidding you and Mike. No explanation was need. LOL

QjQ
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14 posted 2003-08-30 10:28 AM


many times we forget the rules and dance befor paying the band..

         


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15 posted 2003-09-02 09:26 AM


bump
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16 posted 2003-09-02 12:23 PM


I hate it when that happens...

on to Ch3

Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS

QjQ
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17 posted 2003-09-04 04:10 PM


good thoughts expressed,,,

            


J. K. Mitchell
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18 posted 2003-09-04 04:56 PM


I'm dying to know what happens..
Lady Godiva
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19 posted 2003-09-04 06:08 PM



I must read this from the beginning silly me!! Something to look forward to!

gemjop
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20 posted 2003-09-05 09:54 AM


I'm reading all in the wrong order, but i don't think it makes any difference to the impact theyre having on me.

another ouch. god, do we live the same life? you think youre being truthful with yourself, but at the same time, listen to yourself in your head, dismissing the things youre doing, that you promised you never would.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

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