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Icarus' Seduced
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Icarus' Seduced |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
It seemed you whispered The rain to fall from billows Low hung on heated sky And left a lingering breeze As you passed, Me, not quite hearing The words you said You, Not quite pausing Would this front pass Without a leave of thought To the swooshing rustle Love brought with your skirt? Adorn the memory With red and gold from trembling Tenuous leaf Soon to fall And pile in disarray On brown crumble Speak again That I might hear You in pause Of this wind that blows Through the empty places And let it rain Just one more once Whisper to me And let us Begin |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
This is great.I love the flow and the imagery here.You pulled me right into your write  Crystal |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron "just one more once" Smiling at this..and how it says it all. |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Your work is always lyrical but this one has magic in the lines. I feel the summer passing into fall and the wondering if love will ever be found. Lovely poem... |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
this is very enchanting...nice job Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Holy crap you know how to write longing... "Me, not quite hearing The words you said You, Not quite pausing" My favorite lines...why? Because I have had this happen and I have done it....  Susan |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cpat Hair A delight to read. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this reads like a cool breeze before a summer storm...and makes me wish I had wrote it...awesome write of imagery and emotional intend poet sir. You're going to hear my voice in the morning calling your name ... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
its storming here now...first rain in 20 days and breaking the heat wave of triple digits... see how good you are  When was the last time you felt high |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
And to think that I'd nearly missed this altogether... Beautiful, Captain... ~Tier |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Amazing |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Speak again That I might hear You in pause Of this wind that blows Through the empty places And let it rain Just one more once Whisper to me And let us Begin Capt. Ron, you know that I lve every word that you write... but this ending here is really special.  Hugs  Ethel |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
sigh, oh sigh sigh sigh. I've run out of adjectives.  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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