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Perception (Duet by Wranx and Littlewing)
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Perception (Duet by Wranx and Littlewing) |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York 
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Within this gentle exploration a touching as tentative as a touching can be and still be.....tactile is the certain knowledge that love can leave one as sensitive as a fresh burn A stifled moan gave rise to thoughts of wounds freshly healed and bandaged by this kiss beneath spools of two meshed as one a criss-crossing of hopes and fears a faint red spot to mark the place where paths have met…..lingered as substantial in its subtlety as the taste of ones' own name whispered pleading into ones' own mouth Upon such wounds, this kiss doth lie to satiate ancestral cries from brush of burn by hands of silk unraveled with ease, unleashing hurt, as profound in its reality as a single hair drawn long along the curve of lip I sigh.... A grit of teeth lip curl with eyes shine pleasure, shine pain from x to y coordination's neatly placed a union brushed, from hand to face from face to breath and breath to breast The journey from what we've done to what it's made us is as long as the one traveled by the tear…..cried in vain cotton infancy wrapped thus tight falls in pools onto the floor melting, melding with the night [This message has been edited by littlewing (08-27-2003 12:54 AM).] |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
"A grit of teeth lip curl with eyes shine pleasure, shine pain from x to y coordination's neatly placed a union brushed, from hand to face from face to breath and breath to breast The journey from what we've done to what it's made us is as long as the one traveled by the tear…..cried in vain" I love this.. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
I be back... need to read again so tired now |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
And two become one....absolutely wonderful... both of you. keeping it. Maree  fate is not just |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
That first verse? smile. I can say this to you two and you will understand--but I actually pictured humans sniffing each other... and then you took the rest beyond the animalistic--lovely exploration--surprise and revelations. stunning. just stunning. smile. There IS something to be said for doing things slow....  I applaud. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 awesome! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
literally you...how great thou art! Very much enjoyed, thank you so much for this glorious song....you are a wonder little girl and it's a pleasure reading you...hugs....Lee J. |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
 Yet another score by our Little Winged friend...with help from Wranx! You guys are great! This was AWESOME Tima |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
littlewing Excellent to the both of you. |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
Don't even need to read it, I know it's good. But I'll be back, no time now. Nice mysticpoe If nothing is something |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
Ok lw and wranx, after reading a few times. You both have combined your styles very well. Sort of like Mantle and Maris. lw, unless you are a baseball nut. You wouldn't know what I'm talking about. But wranx would. Nice job, nice write. Like to see more of this. mysticpoe If nothing is something |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Bravo! This is superb and going directly into my library! Bravo! Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thank you so much Meg . . . Bri lol . . . you better be back! thank you Maree - from you - I am honored thank you Thank you K, that first verse was Ed - *smile* - bowing gracefully - Ijust followed like a puppy LMAO I just saw your sniffing comment Thank you Dixie! Lee - wow thank you so much, twas Ed that did the leading but thank you so much! Tima thank you so much . . . umm it may be the other way around there . . . * smile* Sy - thank you so much means a lot to me poe your first response was compliment enough . . . the second was amazing and yes, I do know who Mickey Mantle and Roger Maris are. Thank you! Thank you so much Chris! Thank you everyone, this was a wonderful adventure and Ed did most of it anyhow, I just yip-yapped and he made sense of my words (true, not kidding) Ed, thank you so much, I was most honored to write with you again . . . always an adventure much enjoyed Thank you everyone xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (08-27-2003 05:19 PM).] |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Each of you writes with a unique beauty....when the two are melded, the best of each shines through. I hope you two do this again! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wonderfully done...A song in harmony! |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
A great write by two of my favorites, nice job guys. Jason |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
two masters join as one wonderfully...helen |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sue and Ed...so much came to my mind while I was reading this the three times that I did. I can't even say here some of those things...I will say that they were along the same lines as what Karen said. I just don't know how to say them the way she did. It was beautiful beyond words to me. I would love to see more romance written by you two as a duet. Of cours, this hopeless romantic is keeping this, so I can read it many more times. LOL  Hugs to you both  Ethel |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ed - thank you so , coming from you this means a lot Thank you Marti! A song, how lovely, yes Jason and a thank you to one of mine right back . . . Helen, Goodness Masters? Oh My - *shrugging off compliment lol* You, m'lady are the master - thank you Ethel - huge smile . . . I know and if you liked it, then we have succeeded - thank you so much Thanks guys xxoo |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
 I'm soooooo UNWORTHYIf at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. [This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (08-27-2003 09:08 PM).] |
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D'sWhisper Member
since 2003-06-16
Posts 68Washington, USA |
Oh this is Wonderful! Aboslutely wonderful! You guyz have textured this so well. The meter is great...it just flows like wind through a mountain peak...just that naturally. The metaphors are thickly laquered on every notion...but never too much? Everything is just...meant to be where it is. That...is special. I loved this. ~Whisper~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well...this took my breath away... so duet again that I won't turn blue... |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Little Wing & Wranx, this is truly awesome and then some. ...and my favorite line? All... *hugs* ~Tiers |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
The journey from what we've done to what it's made us is as long as the one traveled by the tear…..cried in vain cotton infancy wrapped thus tight falls in pools onto the floor melting, melding with the night harmony.... I love this you guys and you two do that last line uh-huh |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
I love this.You two are an awesome pair It brings such life to your words united as one Crystal |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Seemless and beautiful pairing |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thank you Vandana! Kris you silly thing, stop that Hey! you owe me one of a write you know thank you so much Whisper - thisis the most beautiful reply Thank you so much! Yes, you have much insight indeed Karilea - ahahaha . . . thank you so much *smile* I do value your thoughts highly Tier, from a poetess as fine as yourself I am honored that you like - thank you Bri? *smile* yes . . . thank you Thank you Crystal! One reason I love to duet, you learn so much from each other Raphael . . . such a beautiful compliment from you, it does mean a lot to me *smile* thank you Thank you James! thanks guys xxoo |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Thanks friends...for taking the time to read this. And for all of the kindneses that you've left here. Writing with Susie is a treat. I like the way she can say in 3 words, what takes me a paragraph. Thank you, Miss littlewing for being so patient with one that works as slow as I. |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
*sigh* yeah...slow...love it Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thank you Kristie |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
In reading this again (anew), it pleases me still. I'm going to give it a nudge back to the top. Hope you don't mind. Thanks to all that have read! Ed |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
OMG! this is exquisite! I can't begin to describe how this one touches me, except to tell you both it is my favorite of all the duets I've read here. No lie, no tease in this reply. I'm keeping it, and if you don't mind, I'll print a copy for my 'hard copy' favorites binder. Lovin the feel and the flow of this. |
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jade dragoness Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 76 |
as substantial in its subtlety as the taste of ones' own name whispered pleading into ones' own mouth *** insightful good write |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Ah...the blending of two poets. Well done. This is magical! I think MORE is a good word to describe it!! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Sue and Wanx, this is beautiful, sweet friend, we all need to wear these bandages when comes the injuries, as then we truly gain the ability to feel, rather than using those antibiotics! (big hugggssssss) God Bless You, sweet friends, this is lovely, we all love you so much! You have such beautiful hearts, sweet Sue and Wranx, thank you both for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you both! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Oh My! That was...nice. Do it again! Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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