Open Poetry #28 |
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Path of A Tear (revised) |
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Bonnie j Senior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 1588Ohio ![]() |
Path of A Tear A tear gently touching reddened cheeks. Trickling down shower walls and spiraling down a hole leading to waters of dirty crystal and to manmade power plants. This tear traveling to rivers, lakes and to the oceans of the world. That single tear making patterns of crisscross design. This elaborate design spilling over onto the soils of earth. This tear sharing with mother earth the nutrients of life and touchable radiance. Ah! The path of the tear Look at theflourishing beauty of that single tear. Praise to the powers that be. Praise The Path of A Tear. ![]() |
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Brigid WillowKeeper Member
since 2003-08-24
Posts 88OHIO IN USA |
Again, very good, but I can't see the differance, but mabye a word or two. |
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Bonnie j Senior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 1588Ohio |
Hi Glad you reread this one. I changed several lines. Adding here and taking away on others. Same idea just a little different. I do this with my writings all the time I reread and reread and change. Then maybe I'm happy with it.Maybe not.Sometimes I have an idea, then I don't know how to end it. I have several poems started with no ending.Oh! Well!. Maybe one day I'll have an ending.Again thanks for your imput. See Ya Bon-Bon ![]() |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
An enjoyable unique read, Bonnie. Don't worry about endings. Some things shouldn't end. ![]() |
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