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Elephant Pushing
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Elephant Pushing |
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Ringo 
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes 
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I'm pushing an elephant up the stairs By trying to forget What's-her-name She didn't mean much anyhow I'm pushing an elephant up the stairs Going for the brass ring of fame I didn't want it anyhow I'm pushing an elephant up the stairs Becoming a business success and rich I don't need it anyhow I'm pushing an elephant up the stairs Just trying to live life as myself I'll make it anyhow We are all equal but we’re individually different and able to reach the impossible if we try. [This message has been edited by Ringo (08-21-2003 08:18 PM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
self deception will get us no where especially when trying to push an elephant up the steps! nice look inside Brad xxoo |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
the repetition's great! that first stanza is my favorite...very powerfully said not too sure about the "manyhow" at the end. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Thanks, Sue... ever the sweetheart. VAS- That "manyhow" was me being too stupid to check my write for errors... It's been changed. I'm glad you liked what you read. We are all equal but we’re individually different |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
After I posted my question, I pondered that it might be a play on words...opposite of "some"how.  Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
As long as you are you and true to yourself, you'll make it through anything my friend  Crystal |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
great attitude, kinda like mine most days |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Yep, I definitely like this, as it describes the struggle. I like the way you cope with those struggles though, and the strength of this writing!! Great job.....~S~ Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart ~~S~~ |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
All that effort and it feels like you are not making any headway. Life certainly can be frustrating and disillusioning, but if you keep pushing that elephant, it might get the idea of what you want it to do! Then hang on! That will be one hellova ride--and you will have deserved your just rewards! You did a wonderful job in conveying the weight of your frustration! P.S. Give the elephant some vitamins!   EA |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Good job Ringo...enjoyed this very much, as I have an elephant poem of my own... |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Yes, the struggle of just trying to live life as ourselves, how GREAT that is, and heavy soemtimes. You know you'll make it anyhow.... Great writing! ~K~ |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
all in due time, there is something in all this for you...belief and patience...tremendous poem.... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Powerful write here Ringo... Very much enjoyed. I'm sure you'll make it to the top of the stairs! ~Hugs~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
ya know, that's a great way to describe it... Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Crystal- Thanks for the words of encouragement. shadows- It's a great attitude to have, isn't it?? Thanks. Sunnyone- Thank you for reading. EA- I don't think Bill gates has the kind of money buy that many vitamins!!! lol. Thanks for the kind words. Sunshine- What's the link for your poem. I always enjoy reading your thoughts. Kahlil- Thanks bunches. Lee- Thank you Enchantress- Words of encouragement from a talent as great as yours is ALWAYS appreciated. KS- Yep... I though so. We are all equal but we’re individually different |
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