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The Velveteen Bear (Kaoru's Challenge)
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The Velveteen Bear (Kaoru's Challenge) |
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Ringo 
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes 
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He sits there in the corner On that chair I have Sitting, Watching, Waiting Ever so patient Hoping for the day his boy returns He was real once He was as real as the clouds in the sky And just as soft He was loved best among all The undisputed King of the Bears Maybe he was a bit too big But he was still nonetheless real Until that night, that painful night When his boy didn't need him any longer Wasn't he loved best any more But the answer didn't come Not for twenty years When he was saved from that fire Covered with soot and smelling of smoke The concern was there in his boy's eyes When that mean woman washed him And caused him to need surgery His boy was there with tears in his eyes He was still loved best among all In time, his boy gave him to another A little girl to whom he wasn't real She held him at night, but it wasn't the same He became real for one more night He didn't know why Only that his boy was holding him and crying But that must have been only a dream Because he is forced to sit there alone Lost in his loneliness Watching and waiting for the time He will be real again. We are all equal but we’re individually different |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
*drooling* This is amazing work, just breathtaking. I'm saving this along with the others, I may have to read this over and over again.. I just may. |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Thank you for the kind words... I'm glad you liked it We are all equal but we’re individually different |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
this is cute...I always loved the story of The Velveteen Rabbit...reminds me of it...great job. Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS [This message has been edited by KristieSue (08-21-2003 12:07 AM).] |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
I loved this. Crystal |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is very cute yet sad at the same time. I loved it. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
KS- If you see the similarity, then I was able to do my job. Thanks. Crystal- I'm glad you did. loner- I'm glad you saw the dichotomy. Thank you. We are all equal but we’re individually different |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
OMG, I am going to cry my eyes out over here . . . beautifully met challenge Brad xxoo |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Sue, Sue, Sue.... You spend too much time crying... How about smiling for us once? Thanks for the kind words. We are all equal but we’re individually different |
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