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Fairy-tale ambition |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981
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Your weak constitution grapples for a hold The reason why you shudder. read the story again please? It is dark inside this cage and I am ready to leave Slash marks on the ceiling counting days until I’m back again Get ready to run Harmless. I am harmless innocent puppy eyes innocent puppy breath innocent puppy teeth… Don’t close your eyes tonight you don’t know who I am only what I am- faceless screams, pointless fear tell me another story? It is dark inside this cage and I am ready to leave The creak of the floorboards The smell of steel I hear your head thinking why can’t I just use the door? you love a happy ending I want oxygen I want air It is dark inside this cage… Open. Close. f i n i s h t h e l i e b e f o r e i t ENDS insanity is not a crime [This message has been edited by Wind (08-19-2003 09:13 PM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well done, Liz... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
it's always enjoyable to read your words...one never knows where your mind is traveling... on any particular day. *s M |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write Liz!! You write far beyond your years. Love the presentation as well. ~Summertime Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
aaahhhhhhh just what i needed. finish the lie before it ends. stop leaving us. now i'm back youre not allowed to be gone. is that selfish? i hope so, i feel like being selfish today. pure liz origionality genius.  gooooooood to read ya me duckie. Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
ooooh i like this..I like dark Liz |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Liz...you never fail to impress me with your poetry, and this is no exception. I'm liking this very much.  Hugs, ~Vicky "My friends are my estate." ~Emily Dickinson [This message has been edited by vlraynes (08-19-2003 02:20 PM).] |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
yes yes I like this... If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
thanks everyone...oh really? is it dark?  I've managed to freak myself out.  and that song..agh. Sunshine- thanks sweet nakdthoughts- no one knows... not even me Nancy- lol..thanks sweetie Gem- yes you are selfish. I leave whenever I want. special brat privlage Raph- yes..we all know you like dark..grinsVicky- I was thinking the same about you..the one about the book and turning the page Ceinwyn-you sound very evil...yes..yes mwahahaha. insanity is not a crime [This message has been edited by Wind (08-19-2003 02:39 PM).] |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Liz, I think sometimes the reason I don't like most dark is because I don't really understand it. But, you know what? I understood this one completely....and I love it!!!!. Liz, just when I think that your writing couldn't possibly get any better, you come up with something like this. I'm keeping this one, my little friend.  Huggs  Ethel (psssstttt!!!! I've still got that Wind rictameter that I wrote for you, and I wrote one for Ralph, too...but I've misplaced them, or something. I've got to find them, then, I'll post them. I wrote them when I was writing all those rictameters.) [This message has been edited by garysgirl (08-19-2003 02:54 PM).] |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
still amazing me with your talent...helen |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
GG- realy? you understood it? because I sure as heck did not. All I know is it is about fear..or whatever you want it to be  I was remebering when I was little and I used to make my mom read the storys over and over because I was afraid she would turn out the lights. Oh and listening to some bizzare music. but if you interpret it otherwise it doesn't matter. half the stuff I write doesn't make much senseHelen- you amaze me too insanity is not a crime [This message has been edited by Wind (08-19-2003 09:19 PM).] |
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