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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space 
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you slither through veins Serpentine was it not enough to share your name that i should share your disease as well? |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
ugh, this slithered right thru me, and made me feel sick. job well done then. lol. i know of who you speak, and often relate completely to these words. hugs ya great galah! that was australian!? beeen watching too many soaps, eating too much junk. yay!<<< i said yay! nooooooooo Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
raffi, is it time for a ballad maybe? no pressure, this is good tho, as always |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
i liked this seemed to have some dark overtones, but good write indeed. "in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums" |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
better in your veins than in your head...ugh..I am scaring myself. Great poem, a little spookey. I l#ve it  insanity is not a crime |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
ahhh . . . see now it is things like this I so wish we could escape from . . . unfortunately we are tied from birth liked the slithering . . . xxoo |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Well said. I think we all cary unwanted "gifts" from the past. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks everybody |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
sometimes I have no idea how to react to your words... but would someday hope to read without feeling your pain... M |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Interpretations can run rampant with this, Raph...something for everyone. A true poet...that's his job. You do it well. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
your words flow throught me like my own blood...but you know...h |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
So very well written it's frightening... ~hugs~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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S Arthur Grey Senior Member
since 2001-03-19
Posts 719woven by a poet's loom |
Are we safe? Intimacy has its price and we should wonder if it is well worth it No diseases here except the addictive behavior of words and we have all come infected s.a.g. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
An excellent and slithering write Sir Raph. Love it when you write like this m'friend. Enjoyed. Hey miss our chats.... *pout* Maree  fate is not just |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This does indeed imply darker things, as all of your work generally does. I confess that I'm unsure as to the source of your inspiration, but the open interpretation that I took to heart is chilling. Hugs, Raph. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
This was chilling, and my take on this was very morbid. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Well methinks that I found my theme poem tonight and to no suprise it was written by you....one of the very few poets here who I relate to and can find pieces of my life in his words. Yes, this can be open to many interpretations, but, I'm sure you know why and how I relate. This one deserves a DAMN! I'm saving this...and once again I have a new fav of yours. Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
damn icewater Raph you keep that genius of yours stored in liquid nitro? |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
thanks everybody |
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