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Open Poetry #28

Sick

MoniDaPoet
Member

since 2003-08-14

Posts 73
California, USA

0 posted 2003-08-17 12:10 PM

*** FYI people - this is no longer me. You can call it a pass reflection.***

Sick

Sipping on tyrannical lemonade
One can look at me and see nothing
These eyes are turned inside out
Want to take a field trip - to a land called ME
And I find it agreeable - walking down a depressing dream
Have laundry to do - my soul's too dirty
And I like to scream - into a jealous pillow
Want to pray in church - my brain is tired again
Now I'm done with this poem
More pills please

I have only my genius to declare!

Minister Joe
Member

since 2003-02-22

Posts 78
TX, USA

1 posted 2003-08-17 01:14 PM

Monica, nice image with "jealous pillow". At first I was unsure if it was *coughcough* sickness, or one of a more dreary kind... the soul kind. However, those two kind of go hand in hand sometimes. Good twist at the end with "more pills please"--it ends the questioning.

Thank you for this,

--Matt

Give what you have.

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

2 posted 2003-08-17 02:03 PM

"Have laundry to do - my soul's too dirty"

...my favorite line..

Glad it's not you now.

Susan

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

3 posted 2003-08-17 03:20 PM

Raw, and a total show of emotion.

Great write.

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