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1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2003-08-17 12:41 PM

Silent Sonnet

I wrote you
a sonnet
printed it
in the sand
but it
didn’t end up
exactly how
I planned
did you read it
before the tide
rushed in
I wrote it
to you here
for my voice sometimes
goes weak and thin
words from a heart
spread across a beach
large letters
spelled it out
in a desert view
then the sonnet
silently washed away
by the current
on the waves
that it drew
I wrote you
a sonnet
printed it
in the sand
but it
didn’t end up
exactly how
I planned

"I am living a life, i have no wish to live. How did this happen?" Unknown

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

1 posted 2003-08-17 01:04 AM

*sigh*

man, I really really liked this..

Saving it..for sure.

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

2 posted 2003-08-17 02:12 AM

ow..

MoniDaPoet
Member

since 2003-08-14

Posts 73
California, USA

3 posted 2003-08-17 02:18 AM

Well done. I love the way you provoke thought with this piece. I like the idea of having to ponder this for a while. Well written and lovely.

I have only my genius to declare!

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

4 posted 2003-08-17 06:52 AM

wonderfully penned - you write with such style and grace - Brava Bella

Roniece Dawson-Bruce

SharaRose
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~

5 posted 2003-08-17 06:57 AM

So full of

Very nice!!!

SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

6 posted 2003-08-17 10:38 AM

Wow....just wow....

Such a wistful little poem....beautifully written...I can see you there on the sand, writing your heart into someothing that you know will be gone so soon...and I can see you just as clearly in the other dimensions of it. I'm keeping this one for sure.

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vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

7 posted 2003-08-17 10:45 AM

nice

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

8 posted 2003-08-17 04:44 PM

Absolutely one of the best!

Thank you for sharing it.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

9 posted 2003-08-17 05:51 PM

Good God this is perfection . . .
reminds me of once when I wrote
in the sand myself . . . ONCE
xxoo

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