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Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2003-08-01 11:23 PM

{From the Notebook}
     another chapter

Stillness of fire:

all night      across black sky
the shadows  of    gray;
the moon   leans,
lifts the sea
empty still
soft exhale of   lavender earth

{would I recognize}

How the wind speaks    when
       playing with
rocks    along        the  shore

    You, part of it
my vision of beauty --
I captured images,
       trailing along  rainbows --
greeted          the moon in darkness
    figures of light
now, in  rainless skies

I hold rain in my hands;
        time;
petals of   a    rose
sweet surrender

{Winter has arrived}

in forms of early dew
long     forgetten     flowers
in lonely   vases     --

again I

kiss the night air--
watch  tides    shift and move--

give me strength,
to rest this moment        in your heart
You live in my embrace
    nobody knows
each level    of meaning --

fragments      & symbols

random clouds  &  fallen leaves

dusk will  whisper
in the midst of a crowd
I often see their reflections
on walls; in clock faces with no numbers

so very tender

     the touch I remember

The way you move me
I walk with your shadow
With your silhouette
Leave the light on
It always comes
Back to you

skyshine

Member Elite

since 2002-02-07

Posts 3058
Beneath the northern stars

1 posted 2003-08-01 11:46 PM

Your images are lovely in here, Lauren. Soft yet powerful.

~Elizabeth

Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone...
~Jewel

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

2 posted 2003-08-01 11:59 PM

Simply beautiful, Lauren.
Hugs,
~Vicky
"My friends are my estate."
~Emily Dickinson

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

3 posted 2003-08-02 02:01 AM

this is beautiful

and I like the breaths
drawn
between
breaths
held

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

4 posted 2003-08-02 02:07 AM

Your absences will be forgiven, as long as bring a gift like this when you return...

Wonderful!

Ed

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2003-08-02 08:35 AM

Very very beautiful Lauren.
So very good to read your words here today.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
Has held me in the same embrace~

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

6 posted 2003-08-02 08:37 AM

Greeneyes
A tender remember and a lovely write.

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

7 posted 2003-08-02 08:58 AM

So good to be
reading you again...

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

8 posted 2003-08-02 09:00 AM

Stillness of fire:

all night      across black sky
the shadows  of    gray;
the moon   leans,
lifts the sea
empty still
soft exhale of   lavender earth

{would I recognize}

How the wind speaks    when
       playing with
rocks    along        the  shore

=============
again I

kiss the night air--
watch  tides    shift and move--

give me strength,
to rest this moment        in your heart
You live in my embrace
    nobody knows
each level    of meaning --

fragments      & symbols

random clouds  &  fallen leaves

dusk will  whisper
in the midst of a crowd
I often see their reflections
on walls; in clock faces with no numbers

so very tender

     the touch I remember
=================================

*sighing moth*

"soft exhale" .. yes.. thats the way your beautiful, ethereal, poetry comes across.

oh how I needed to touch your remember...
for it allows me to touch my own...
the words have not come in so long...
still, as I read you...I feel them stirring..

and your signature... yessssssssss

missed you me lovely butterfly girlie.

"How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you."

LH

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

9 posted 2003-08-02 09:12 AM

Lauren, this was definitely worth the wait! Your poem IS p-o-e-t-r-y! Elegant, descriptive writing!

Linda

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

10 posted 2003-08-02 09:27 AM

Greeneyes - a nice rememberance of a touch. Your writing is stupendous, only as you can do...

BC

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

11 posted 2003-08-02 02:06 PM

GreenEyes~

'dusk will whisper
in the midst of a crowd
I often see their reflections
on walls; in clock faces with no numbers

so very tender

the touch I remember'

As always .... such a delicate read from you~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

12 posted 2003-08-02 02:09 PM

What Ed said.. grins

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

13 posted 2003-08-02 02:24 PM

loved it

Janette

Member Elite

since 2001-07-20

Posts 2843
Chicagoland for now

14 posted 2003-08-02 06:10 PM

"in clock faces with no numbers"

WOW ... great lines in this one

Enjoyed

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

15 posted 2003-08-02 06:12 PM

"So very tender
the touch I remember."
One of my favorites...James

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

16 posted 2003-08-02 06:24 PM

*sigh*

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

17 posted 2003-08-02 06:25 PM

Lauren...Your poetry is always silk lined...this is beautiful!

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

18 posted 2003-08-02 09:07 PM

As always your message and imagery are outstanding. This is beautiful.

Melissa~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

19 posted 2003-08-04 11:52 PM

You HAVE a very tender touch, with just this kind of verse....Beautiful! Beautiful! I'm glad that we're seeing more of you, these days.

~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>
______________Ratleader______________

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

20 posted 2003-08-05 03:35 AM

a very tender touch

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

21 posted 2003-08-05 10:43 AM

How very, very beautiful!!! *S*

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

22 posted 2003-08-05 07:58 PM

lovely, Lauren
*s
M

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

23 posted 2003-08-05 08:02 PM

enjoyed

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

24 posted 2003-08-07 02:15 AM

Lauren, I sure did think that I read this the
other day. I'm glad I looked. It is so beautiful.
I expecially loved this part.....

I hold rain in my hands;
        time;
petals of   a    rose
sweet surrender

Just perfect, my friend

Hugs

Ethel

(psssttt!! go find some more from your
"notebook" to post for us to read. Please??)

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

25 posted 2003-09-17 04:01 PM

give me strength,
to rest this moment        in your heart
You live in my embrace
    nobody knows
each level    of meaning --

fragments      & symbols

random clouds  &  fallen leaves

dusk will  whisper
in the midst of a crowd
I often see their reflections
on walls; in clock faces with no numbers

so very tender

     the touch I remember

beauty takes many forms..and the beauty of well sorted words conveying the atmosphere as well as the intent...are indeed a thing of beauty to me...

so very well done my friend.. so very well done indeed

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