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Make me a Storm
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Make me a Storm |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Make me a Storm I talk to the mist the steady drip that touches the leaf I see it quiver be bigger louder harder and enough to make the smell of wet cement I talk to the clouds clutching at the light give in to the dark swirl with it in consort make me a storm The air is dense strike it with your hammer slap the sky into the trees dance with these tall stalks of sunflowers throw a torrent into the river I am a small slug just a trail across the dry leaves wet them until they tear and shred fall down on me until I am mulched make me a storm |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You tend to see the smallest things in oh so big a way...this is so well done, Martie...I know this feel, but I can never describe it as well as you do...thank you! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I would love to send you all of ours... lend me your sun, would you  nicely writtenM |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Smile. You understand the principles of magick. Myself? I try to tread carefully here in Hurricane country. Your descriptions are fresh and full of child-like wonder. Happy Solstice witchy one.  |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Oh be careful of that for which you wish! I once had to swear off lightning for five years to atone for the damages I did playing with it! Th e poetry is great. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Fantastic write here as always poetess Martie. Much enjoyed the read tonight. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"I am a small slug just a trail across the dry leaves wet them until they tear and shred fall down on me until I am mulched make me a storm" Poof! You're a storm.  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I have to agree with Karilea 1000 percent. You make the small seem so huge with your words that change the dictionary into an art form. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
slap the sky into the trees dance with these tall stalks of sunflowers throw a torrent into the river =================================== *shaking me head* only you...... and Im soooooooo glad you do  No matter what the differences |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Well you certainly turned me into a fan.  |
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eminor_angel Member
since 2003-05-22
Posts 323Canada |
Great write. I love your bold imagery. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Perfectly charming!! hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Your poems are like taking nature walks, filled with fascination and intrigue. The view from your eyes is a special one. As always, I love your work Martie~ |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
We've had 40 days of rain out of the past 48. It's a wonder that this shack hasn't yet floated away. (methinks the witch (yes, that one)has prayed our drought away) |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Oh, this is fine! I want one too -- enough of mist and mistyness, let those clouds loose to do what they really want, and pour it onto us.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ [This message has been edited by Ratleader (06-22-2003 01:29 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wonderful write martie |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Spring forgot us this year... two months of zero precipitation... As much as I gripe about playing farm slave, I felt sorry for my Dad... so much work into a garden... and not enough moisture for a seed to sprout. The weather never seems to get it quite right... it could take a lesson from you... for your poems are always perfection. *S* |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ Lovely ... remember that Cherokee rain chant I sent you ? Love you gal~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Well, it is still just dripping here...can't even call it rain. Thanks for the replies...and Marge, yes, I remember, and as I recall, it worked! (but darn if I can remember it!  ) |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
sometimes the mundane is the most beautiful pallet of life....a very good write...it was a pleasure reading. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - just so enjoying the read here - taking the wonderful journey you offer me - loved it - Paul |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I talk to the clouds clutching at the light give in to the dark swirl with it in consort make me a storm I love this Martie.....this part does sound like an Indian rain dance...  Hugs, sweet Lady  Ethel |
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martina Member
since 2003-06-19
Posts 59 |
AWSOME KEEP WRITING Martina |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggssssssss) Oh Martie, this is beautiful, sweet friend, I could sure wish for a storm like this here, so I should summon the rain God and let fertility and harvest sprout all about! (kiss on cheek) Yay, this is beautifully vibrant, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
you are poetry please keep sharing such great works... regards sudhir |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
We did our storms for the week - I sent them your way - Did they arrive??...  |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
"The air is dense strike it with your hammer slap the sky into the trees dance with these tall stalks of sunflowers" I love your poetry I love you Liz |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Excellent write Martie  ARCTIC WIND |
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