Open Poetry #27 |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
a rotting car sad guitar dull rust and empty words dust covers everything I do I say I think disturbed only for a small time then the blanket can sleep too I will save you because you are all my mind and I don't want to lose it eyes out past the campfire watching quiet gargoyle's blues |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I love the first stanza of this somewhat enigmatic poem. Nice one. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I will save you because you are all my mind and I don't want to lose it ================================ *sigh* love the depth, desperation and devotion of that declaration. No matter what the differences |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Lessee...M is for Mystical...Madviking? Mysterious...Maddening...Maniacal...MINE! Me? OH. I get it love. Congratulations, Bri, on your 1,000th post. This Marvelous. (still couldn't sleep---sheesh--sorry...) |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I have a tattoo on my left shoulder of a gargoyle that is sitting on his butt, knees up with elbows resting on them, his face in his hand and it looks like he's crying...would have been really neat to put the picture of it up here but ????? don't know how... anyway, really cool write and I'm gonna put it in my library |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
1,000 gifts you've left behind for such is short, a writer's time but never is the blue so blue as when a phrase is turned by you... keep writing Bri... we'll keep reading... all of it. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Bri: the eyes watching - very cool line as in: watching from afar . . . very nice indeed bittersweet . . . xxoo |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
thank you everybody your words mean a lot to me |
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Second Self Junior Member
since 2003-05-15
Posts 15 |
I think I got it... Hope so because I like it... You can pack a lot of meaning in small phrases... |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Congrats in your 1,000th !-- Great write, very much Enjoyed. ARCTIC WIND |
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