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Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2003-06-18 07:20 PM


My thoughts interrupt my thoughts,
they are stumbling across eachother.
Like a clumsy pyramid of cheerleaders.
I've been written into a room full of doors,
staring at a clock with no hands to it's surface.
Time is a multitude of sins
going around in circles and twisting around the
inevitable bloodshed
within
my head.

And I'm real, in motion..
an eclipse above my heart I
tear this world up and split it apart into
when the clock strikes two.
And when tomorrow didn't hold such
a grudge against my
emotion.

Chances are, if I'm so uneven,
I'll collapse..
Like a clumsy butterfly with a missing wing.


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1 posted 2003-06-18 07:37 PM


Your title fits the described maladies
perfectly...we all have these days...
and pray they are only days...not
eternities...

A butterfly with one wing hits the bullseye.

passing shadows
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2 posted 2003-06-19 02:54 AM


very cool write, I can relate well to this!
Jason Lyle
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3 posted 2003-06-19 05:29 AM


loved the read, loved the write.

Jason

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4 posted 2003-07-24 11:08 AM


My thoughts interrupt my thoughts,
they are stumbling across eachother.

This is why I don't sleep. As for the butterfly with broken wing analogy, there's too much strength emotionally in your writing to go with that.

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5 posted 2003-07-24 11:47 AM


hey girl, i enjoyed this one
littlewing
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6 posted 2003-07-25 07:23 PM


Kaoru - this is amazing . . .
and trust me I fly on one wing all the time
xxoo

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