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gemjop
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0 posted 2003-08-01 06:16 PM



Facing you
is my fear

There is no
simpler way
to say it

Foreseeing
all my pieces
retrieved
fall effortlessly
to your crumble
of my voice

You
never hear me
in my head

Convincing myself
this is ok

I loved you
without even
~thinking~

You
were never my
burden
in spite
of it all

Would have
oh would have

doesn't it sound pretty

lazy

Grace me with
yourself no more

I did

all the things

to see it your way

Paul echoed
as I wrote falling words
knowing the end

writing a letter
I've never sent

knowing
you
would remain
selfish
and
unchanged
.


Instant karma's gonna get you.

[This message has been edited by gemjop (08-01-2003 06:29 PM).]

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Aenimal
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1 posted 2003-08-01 06:29 PM


I like you much better than Paul..he always comes off as such a tool..and yes i should be asleep but it's not sticking..
gemjop
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2 posted 2003-08-01 06:56 PM


Oi! remember, get some sleep, cos u cant die on me. who will i take the mickey out of?

i remembered a question i had to ask, remind me next time. its not interesting, i just cant work it out.

i'm contemplating some more fooooood

Margherita
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3 posted 2003-08-01 07:42 PM


Very intense write ... even though you fear facing him, the title promises well, so you might give him a chance!
Love, Margherita

Wind
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4 posted 2003-08-01 07:46 PM


i don't have the slightest clue what either one of you are talking about. on other note, I enjoyed your poem...very much so..

insanity is not a crime

Kaoru
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5 posted 2003-08-01 09:06 PM


Gem..

This is intense, I agree.

littlewing
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6 posted 2003-08-01 10:42 PM


Life is very short, and there's no tiiiime
for fussing and fighting . . .

this played while I read
I heard this through your words, Gem
I know . . .
xxoo  

garysgirl
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7 posted 2003-08-02 01:47 AM


Hi Gemmagirl  
A very good write, as always.
Hugs, my friend  
Ethel

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8 posted 2003-08-02 01:56 AM


I was going to highlight a couple stanzas that hit me hardest, but then I read it again, and I realised that I couldn't because then I'd have to highlight the entire poem. Beautiful, yet aching write. *hugs*
Goldenrose
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9 posted 2003-08-02 05:11 AM


Nice writing Gem....thank you for the words...

Goldenrose.

JamesMichael
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10 posted 2003-08-02 06:00 AM


LIke this...James
El_Campeador
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11 posted 2003-08-02 09:19 AM


Another great poem, Gemma...

“We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson

Janette
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12 posted 2003-08-02 10:27 AM


Oh yes, those fears ... I know them oh so well.
SharaRose
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13 posted 2003-08-02 10:49 AM


What this write is about is a *very* painful place to be. It's a process. Takes time, and hurts *alot.* This is when you need your friends, because it's like a grieving the loss of blood relatives. Here's hoping you recover from this intact, and not a long process. Cover yourself with people that love you!!!

SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

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