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White Picket Fences
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White Picket Fences |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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White Picket Fences Yesterday I came to the realization that I really don’t care anymore. There’s beauty now where hatred once laid restless, there’s calm that I no longer want to smash the faces in of lovers on the screen, of those with no pain, only gain. Now I laugh, stripping skin off skin, numb is acceptance and fairytales are boring, too predictable; What a fool I’ve been, typical mass produced female wanting the white picket fence and roses without the thorns. Love has a funny way of picking favourites of dealing an ugly hand to one and supplying the white paint to others without strings. I guess in this lifetime I’m it's puppet in play, and now I know the sadness of becoming strangers from the marriage that hope and I used to hold. I used to think that everyone had their chance to paint the white over the black, that everyone found a love that would last, that God understood this need, this vital kiss to survive; What a fool I’ve been, typical mass produced dreamer loyal to a possibility that isn't loyal to me. But, I’ve found that God does build white picket fences afterall and the piece from it that He's given me is big enough, sharp pointed spear to pierce through my heart, white enough to soak up the blood of dreams left to die. By Melissa Long-Monette [This message has been edited by Honeybee (08-01-2003 12:51 AM).] |
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Jordyn05 Member
since 2003-07-17
Posts 62 |
Super poem. Keep on writting. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh God Melissa..this just aches... I do hope this is not a total reflection of you personally and rather a wonderfully written piece of work. Be well sweetie..be safe. ~Soft smiles & genlte hugs, Nancy~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
I l*ve this, not that you feel this but that you wrote this..amazing and yes dark x8 |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
What a fool I’ve been, typical mass produced female wanting the white picket fence and roses without the thorns. Oh my...you said it all! Just discussing this topic with friends. So many great lines, words, phrases...here...too many to quote. Woman, you did it...yep, you said it all perfectly. Patricia |
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Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
Ya know, Melibea.... My heart aches when I read these but you keep blowing me away with them... I am just hoping that it is just your incredible talent at work here and you are not that jaded..... By the way..... what happenned to your picture.... you're looking kind of pale today dear. Take care Sherry Cherish the good memories of the past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow. But above all... be kind to yourself today. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
You know what? I never dreamed of white picket fences. I always thought that trouble was much more interesting. In fact- I just walked barefoot by a rosebush..and sliced my foot open..and I really could care les. sigh..yes, i L*ved this. very much. you really have a way of telling it like it is. Give yourself more credit...I'm not going to be repedative insanity is not a crime |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Love has a funny way of picking favourites of dealing an ugly hand to one and supplying the white paint to others without strings. I guess in this lifetime I’m it's puppet in play, and now I know the sadness of becoming strangers from the marriage that hope and I used to hold. ======================== But, I’ve found that God does give white picket fences afterall and the piece from it that He's given me is big enough, sharp pointed spear to pierce through my heart, white enough to soak up the blood of dreams left to die. ========================= wow... whoa ... whew ... Oh Girl ... this is.... kicked in the chest... up in your face ... knock you down twice ... taking names and kicking butt poetry!! What a powerful angsty clever write of emotion dressed up in metaphor taken to the limit. Very cool conception here Melis...and you carried it out to poetic perfect. You stayed with one main theme and conflict, let your pen rant and still kept it tight and on target... I would have to say this is up there with your very best. Superb write poetess Melibee  I LOVED it and no astericks are needed  "How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you." |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
hey JM leave my asterisks alone |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Honeybee - you're not a fool Melissa, not a fool. Love is strange, and has strange ways. Keep those words coming, and one day they will start to change to bring forth the tenderness that is in your soft heart. I for one will be waiting to see those words... BC |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Raph... I'll be gentle with them... I promise. lol |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
This aches with such pain and sadness.I hope this is just a sad but awesome write from you and not a personal experience. angelblueyes |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
This hurts. I hope you will find the love of your dreams someday, Melissa... “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Melissa, You are the sweet and sour of my day and I love both. LOL  Excellent |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
No matter what you write about Melissa, your talent always shines through every word. |
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