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Serenity's Challenge ( 5-h ) shattered kisses
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Serenity's Challenge ( 5-h ) shattered kisses |
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Riley 
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain 
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its supposed to be about a mirror, but turned out morbid and dark...sheesh! Reflections of eyes stare back into nothing Black solitude that I can only call my own Drops of red run tenderly down Pulling pieces of the rotting skin I see before me in the mirror Into my mouth, surpassing the lips Only I see in the reflection I kiss every night For I am alone with only one companion Broken glass that lays on the cold floor For that I suffer misery That started because I was born Still searing through naked flesh It takes my stringed body away Making me crumple to the floor Seeing my bloody face in broken glass The image I’ve held in my head to long *the bloody tide comes in on the shore, time after time* [This message has been edited by Riley (07-31-2003 02:21 PM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Indeed that would have been an image held in your head too long!!! I'd suggest you get a new mirror! One that reflects the beauty in you!   EA |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
it started out a nice little poem about a mirror and tooka dive off the deep end.....i need a new mirror like i need to breath, but  , yes, well thank you much for replying.*the bloody tide comes in on the shore, time after time* |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Yikes! This is certainly dark....but oh, so well done! Great job Riley! Chris  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Good job Riley! You met the challenge head on and did it very well. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Riley not only have you met the challenge but this is one amazing piece of work! God, I know that feeling, as most of us do Packs a punch for sure - awesome job (btw I once did a write to a challenge Larry had and we were suppossed to write something happy and choose a topic so I chose "Best Friend" and it ended up a morbid triolet about my dead dog) LOL This is really good xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (07-31-2003 03:25 PM).] |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
dark is good!!  and I agree you met this challenge well..If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
nightshade: dark seems to be more my style now.....  littlewing: thank you so much for your kind compliments and making me smile with your story ceinwyn: thanks for you kind words riley *the bloody tide comes in on the shore, time after time* |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Yes! dark IS good. Loved it Riley  insanity is not a crime |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
dark IS not only good, but awesomely good right now...tankie for the reply wind, thanks*the bloody tide comes in on the shore, time after time* |
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