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When Did You Change?
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When Did You Change? |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA 
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Pushing back old layers frayed in your absence malting the weak rooted wisps of holding on why should I let you, spoil twisted in anger the beauty inbetween my heart and eyes for brain aches confusion constant of how I appreciated every moment and still lost I have so much in replacement the void you possess so close to nothing matters unravel, undress you can't say you're satisfied where we have settled random no, you put us where we are I know the hours weren't wasted for this there must be something ha maybe not You tucked me in kissed brow fretted over my anger Now I lay bare in bold silence unafraid that you lost the care Yet will always wonder when where and how it lost you or vice versa . Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
gemjop or vice versa Enjoyed. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
very nice write, this made me think a lot. I like your phrasing very much. Take care. Amy  |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Gemjop..gumdrop. heh. just one thought..sometimes it's not that the person changed..but that theynever change and are unable to grow. anyways..i loved your poem-or vice versa (nah..just messin with you) you know that one poem that you wrote? i say it too myself sometimes..the nowhere woman poem. I liked the form of this too..it was like a needle.. Gem- never be normal  insanity is not a crime |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I have so much in replacement the void you possess so close to nothing matters unravel, undress you can't say you're satisfied where we have settled ======================== whoa.. that is such a cool verse... this part just rose off the page and spoke to me. well done poetess gem "How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you." |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
Ah, this one hurts. Good write, Gemma... “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Thankyou...I think I'm finally getting my head straight.  Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
It is definitely in the air ... CHANGE! |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
Such a beautiful smile but so much pain behind it *sigh* change is nice..like I said a gazillion times I wish I could wave my magic wand but yanno stupid thing ran away with the spoon..while the cow jumped over the moon lol errrr n/m  If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
amazing gem.. simply amazing purge |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Are you sure we aren't living the same lives? *hugs* Lady |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
I love the way the style changed in this poem, so deeply moving, as well. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I echo Kaoru, the style does lend effectiveness--from the initial outpouring to the release of word dripping down the page--works wonderfully for the message. And this one--what can I say lady? I live it too. But in my own persoal take on it? I have to wonder if he changed or if I finally took off the rose colored glasses. sigh. Maybe he didn't change at all. Maybe I just SEE him now. Warm hugs. |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
great write.... riley *the bloody tide comes in on the shore, time after time* |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Very powerful.  ~Elizabeth Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Men don't really change. They just end their masquerades!   EA [This message has been edited by Earth Angel (07-30-2003 11:57 AM).] |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Gemma, So much of what you wrote is so true....very nice. Susan C. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Gemma - this has a beautiful flow and here: or vice versa . yes I wonder too . . . xxoo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damn gemma  how I can relate |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
 Thanks for stopping by, with your kind words and advice. I appreciate every word yanno? love yoooouuuuu! xxxxxxx Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Unless you are really mean I don't think people want you to change too much...the person you are is the person they are attracted to...James |
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