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VBallNut Member
since 2003-02-12
Posts 60Virginia, USA |
The time I've spent with you means more to me each day. I've found a love to last a lifetime; a love that's here to stay. You're there when I need comfort to banish a hectic day, You're there to catch the tears that took my smile away. This is just the beginning, or the middle, or the end of something.Just wanted to get the words down so I didn't forget them!Any criticism is welcome! |
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eminor_angel Member
since 2003-05-22
Posts 323Canada |
Good start. I especially like the line "You're there to catch the tears". Please post it when you're finished.  |
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skyshine 
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
I think it's a good start! When you finish it please post it so we can see the rest of it as well. Good luck!  ~Elizabeth Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I think it's great as it stands |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
Your imagery is beautiful, I too really like the phrase "You're there to catch the tears that took my smile away." “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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VBallNut Member
since 2003-02-12
Posts 60Virginia, USA |
Thank you all for your kind replies. I'm still working and I promise to post when I'm finished! |
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