For my father (repost from #23)

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Open Poetry #27

For my father (repost from #23)

wranx
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since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

0 posted 2003-06-15 03:16 PM

Do you recall
The very first time
That your father
Requested
That you kill a man?

Not a request, actually
A demand, in reality

And not just a man
In any general sense
But one particular
Human being

An unsavory task
Framed as familial
Obligation

I remember that moment
As being quite
Disconcerting

We had always lived
On the edge of Mans’ Law
A tax tweak
A code cheat
Some minor smuggling

But, not this

This was a concept
Quite alien to me

Was he not
The very person
That instilled in me
The ability to judge
The value of an action

To differentiate between
The Right thing
And the Other?

So, there I sat
Dumbfounded
As he calmly traced
Upon his map of rage
The route
That I should take
To my damnation

And a part of me
To this very day
Wants to say

Sorry Dad,
That I was unable
To give you back
My humanity

Kaoru

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since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

1 posted 2003-06-15 03:29 PM

Wow, great write. It's pretty morbid, but I like morbid.

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

2 posted 2003-06-15 03:43 PM

Oh, I remember the impact this one had on me the first time you posted it.
It's the same number on the Richter scale this time.

wranx
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since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

3 posted 2003-06-15 03:47 PM

Thanks for the read Kaoru.

Thank you as well Kacy.

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

4 posted 2003-06-15 04:09 PM

'Sorry Dad,
That I was unable
To give you back
My humanity'

After having read both this and your post to your son, it seems you learned from your fathers mistakes...

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

5 posted 2003-06-15 07:53 PM

I know this one too Ed
and the bite is just as harsh
the second time around . . .

you know I know
xxoo

brian sites
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since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

6 posted 2003-06-16 03:00 AM

this echoes still

not only in it's readers

ya know?
I figger
exercizin them demons ownly makesem
strawnger
Raht?

masterpiece Ed

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

7 posted 2003-06-16 03:03 AM

damn...

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16

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Realm of Supernatural

8 posted 2008-02-03 03:13 PM

Enjoyed your write!

ARCTIC WIND

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