One Less Interrupt - personal challenge by Vicky

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Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2003-07-27 05:02 PM

One Less Interrupt

Tacka-a-ta-tacka-a-ta-tacka-a-ta…..

Delete delete delete…

Now, I can tell, as she
Sits idle.

There goes the thought.  I know
When it disappears.
Manicured nails
Lay quietly at asdf  jkl;
Two thumbs warming my space bar
Palms resting on my palmrest…

Then her eyes move from the monitor where the words
Were appearing, looking down at me,
A frown of disappoint wrinkling her brow
And lining her eyes,
As if I had let her down.

She doesn’t mean it, literally.
But where did the thought go?

I provide no answers in my
qwertyuiop
asdfghjkl;
zxcvbnm,.

Even staring hard at
1234567890
Doesn’t help.

As quickly as her muse sprinkled
In her the idea for the novel,
A brief ding or other interrupt
And it flew away.

Raised to respect, she swallows
Then shuns words of ill-temper
That swell momentarily.

It’s the same with her poetry.

F12.  Save As.  Give it a name, the idea
Is half-way birthed.
The labor is hard.

She remembers the time when she shared a kernel
Of story,
And then it took on
A life of its own.  Well meaning friends
Lauded, applauded, the story poem grew.

Each new part, each new line, drew
Breath from her lungs,
Blushed at her flush,
Wound up as tight as the sinews
In her arms
After throwing bales of hay.

She worked the land,
She worked me.

As many steps in a day as her feet took,
She multiplied them who knew how many times
Through her finger strokes.

She even utilized Z a lot.

But when she birthed a poem,
A true epic from her
Mind, with a little help from

Muse,

She never rested on it.

She had rested her mind for far too long,
And now she was giving birth
To the promise.

Her fingers having done it all, the
Raising of children and flowers,
Preparing food and drink,
Laundering and bathing,
Hanging clothes and folding towels
Stripping paint and floor wax
And working for others
To make a way.

But she held to the promise
And the promise is me.

I will get her there, even if the interrupts
Are frequent, for I am her escape
and her sin, her diary and her confessor;
I am the holder of dreams and wishes,
And know of the silent tears
That inwardly flow down her arms
Into her fingers.

Tacka-a-ta-tacka-a-ta-tacka-a-ta…..
Tacka-a-ta-tacka-a-ta-tacka-a-ta…..
Tacka-a-ta-tacka-a-ta-tacka-a-ta…..

Shhh.  She only prays for one less interrupt.

~*~

Asked vlraynes for a challenge…
She wanted to know if I had ever
Put myself into the role of a keyboard.

Well, if I hadn’t before,
I have now.

Vicky?  This one’s for you!

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (07-27-2003 05:19 PM).]

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

1 posted 2003-07-27 05:20 PM

"But she held to the promise
And the promise is me.

I will get her there, even if the interrupts
Are frequent, for I am her escape
and her sin, her diary and her confessor;
I am the holder of dreams and wishes,
And know of the silent tears
That inwardly flow down her arms
Into her fingers.

Tacka-a-ta-tacka-a-ta-tacka-a-ta…..
Tacka-a-ta-tacka-a-ta-tacka-a-ta…..
Tacka-a-ta-tacka-a-ta-tacka-a-ta…..

Shhh. She only prays for one less interrupt."

Wow...you really took this and ran with it, Karilea.
I think I'm going to have to come up with something
more difficult for your next challenge.
GREAT job!
Hugs,
~Vicky

"My friends are my estate."
~Emily Dickinson
[This message has been edited by vlraynes (07-27-2003 05:45 PM).]

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

2 posted 2003-07-27 05:21 PM

Jesus Karilea . . .
I stare at my own as if it is breathing
Brilliant challenge
and tribute for a friend
xxoo

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2003-07-27 05:31 PM

Amazing job!
You are something, Karilea!
Love and hugs. Margherita

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2003-07-27 05:43 PM

"I will get her there, even if the interrupts
Are frequent, for I am her escape
and her sin, her diary and her confessor;
I am the holder of dreams and wishes,
And know of the silent tears
That inwardly flow down her arms
Into her fingers."

Oh my....Karilea...this is amazing!!
Now I am at a loss for words...
~Hugs YOU!~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
Has held me in the same embrace~

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

5 posted 2003-07-27 06:27 PM

I will never look at my keyboard the same way ever again!--I do believe I owe her more respect!

You are soooo imaginative, Dear Karilea!

Linda

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

6 posted 2003-07-27 07:24 PM

enjoyed this

Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

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Riding

7 posted 2003-07-27 11:39 PM

*looks at the keyboard*

Well my parent's keyboard doesn't mean that much to me, but MY keyboard? You described it perfectly *grin*

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

8 posted 2003-07-28 12:39 PM

This, of course~

I will get her there, even if the interrupts
Are frequent, for I am her escape
and her sin, her diary and her confessor;
I am the holder of dreams and wishes,
And know of the silent tears
That inwardly flow down her arms
Into her fingers.

Fantastic, all of it!!

*Bravo* Karilea~

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

9 posted 2003-07-28 01:33 AM

Karilea, this is awesome. My keyboard plays music sometimes.....other times it seems to cry. LOL
Hugs

Ethel

Kielo
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since 2002-02-11

Posts 1109

10 posted 2003-07-28 02:02 AM

Sweet, sweet fruit. Healthy, and so good it leaves you breathless.... Your keyboard is taking my breath away, and I couldn't be happier about it.

Kielo

I'll never know the cost, but all of Him is more than enough for all of me....

Patricia
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since 2003-04-06

Posts 2160
Missouri

11 posted 2003-07-28 07:03 AM

This is incredible...I agree with EA...I will never look at my keyboard the same way. A very interesting challenge--very creatively met.

Patricia

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

12 posted 2003-07-28 08:05 PM

Ahhhhh Karilea, how you shine m'friend how you shine.

Absolutely wondeful.

keeping this.

Maree

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

13 posted 2003-07-28 08:19 PM

Oh, Karilea, I love this. You never cease to amaze me with your talent! hugs, Chris

"At one glance
I love you
With a thousand hearts."

— Mihri Hatun, Turkish poet

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