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Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

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0 posted 2003-07-27 09:35 AM

Living In Sketches

it comes down to this
                                  : living in sketches
draw a few       !
                          lines,
         imagine        ,         the rest
                    unicolor         ...
dimensionless
                        ! never to             scale
           ,  the mind fills in details
touching but                never            touched
        and I want them!                want them!
                    give, me, the, contours,
                  bring  in  round  and  edge
    texture the text,
                                  the context
             subtext                 book the index
shadows
                        oh how I yearn for
          shadows
    bold hues   simpering pastels     breath
                , the scent of things
and light, oh baby pour that sweet light
          drag me in like a mirror
               let me be present
                         real

[This message has been edited by Ratleader (07-27-2003 11:26 AM).]

Midnitesun

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Gaia

1 posted 2003-07-27 09:44 AM

Playing with your etch and sketch again, Ed?
LOL.

enjoyed this

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

2 posted 2003-07-27 10:21 AM

'morning, Ed. I enjoyed this picture of words this morning.
Thank you.

Hugs

Ethel

Marge Tindal

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3 posted 2003-07-27 10:33 AM

Ed~
Your depth is soooooo touching~

I found this thought mesmerizing -
'oh how I yearn
for shadows
bold hues
simpering pastels'

simpering pastels ... sooooo soft the imagery~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

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Oregon

4 posted 2003-07-27 11:41 AM

excellent form for the theme of this piece...really enjoyed the line breaks, punctuation...punctuating the thoughts of living in sketches

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

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5 posted 2003-07-27 11:51 AM

Ed...Your form in this poem is as much a part of the meaning as the words. Can feel a scattered feeling, incomplete. So very well done!

Ratleader

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6 posted 2003-07-27 01:44 PM

It does feel that way at times, things you want, want to be and do, and all impossible except in the most incomplete sense, as wishes and dreams that will never be more than partially fulfilled.

.....then there are those other times, when you know you're darned lucky to be as able as you are, as close to 'em as you are. So you live a life of quiet, if desperate, serenity.

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suthern

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7 posted 2003-07-27 05:49 PM

oh how I yearn for
          shadows
    bold hues   simpering pastels     breath
                , the scent of things
and light, oh baby pour that sweet light
          drag me in like a mirror
               let me be present
                         real

Your title and the excellent visual aspect of the poem bring to mind the faintest of pencil drawings... but as I read and absorbed the words, a portrait worthy of the masters emerged... for this could only be written by someone with amazing depth... Your response just reinforced those thoughts. *S*

Simply superb, my friend. *S*

vandana

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8 posted 2003-07-27 07:30 PM

enjoyed

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light

9 posted 2003-07-27 08:23 PM

You are an artist!--poetically and visually!

EA

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

10 posted 2003-07-27 08:40 PM

dimensionless
                        ! never to             scale
           ,  the mind fills in details
touching but                never            touched

I'm so happy to see you back Ed~
Your sketchings are fabulous
and this is quite something!

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