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I Am (Karen's Challenge)
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I Am (Karen's Challenge) |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... 
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I Am I am the voice of confidence within a heart of insecure I wonder what you think you see when looking at the whole of me I hear the voices in my head - they tell me I'm not good enough I see myself in mirror and reflect on who I have become I want someone to love beyond the surface to the real of me I am the voice of confidence within a heart of insecure I feign contentedness and smile in costume of felicity I feel the sting of loneliness when I succeed in masquerade I touch the child inside of me and wonder where she went astray I fear that I'm not worthy of the acclamations passed my way I cry in solitary world - I cannot let the people see I am the voice of confidence within a heart of insecure I understand the consequence of hiding heart's identity I say I'll show the all of me and let the cards fall where they may I oft' imagine unity - a peace for all humanity I try my best to make a difference in the lives surrounding me I hope you think of me as 'friend' and know I love you endlessly I am the voice of confidence within a heart of insecure ~vlraynes "My friends are my estate." ~Emily Dickinson [This message has been edited by vlraynes (07-25-2003 05:48 PM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Are you sure you're not me? (scary thought, that, huh?)  We all seem to be dropping the veils. (hmmm...I seem to be on a nudity streak.) HA. A NUDITY STREAK. sometimes I crack myself up. grin. Great answer to the call, Miss Vicky. Love ya just as you are!  |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"I feel the sting of loneliness when I succeed in masquerade..." Et Tu?  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Vicky, this brought tears to my eyes...pain in my heart because your truth of words lies in me. I see myself there between your lines and for the sake of me, I can't figure out how to rise above it all. A wonderful touching description  M |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Vicky--I understand the honesty in this, love the girl inside and the woman she became...and insecurity I know lots about. Thank you for this touching piece of yourself. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Vicky, I applaud you for being so honest and here: I touch the child inside of me and wonder where she went astray I fear that I'm not worthy of the acclamations passed my way Good God, this is so me beautiful xxoo |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
V, my sister poet: You ARE a wonderful strength, courageous and encouraging. This was wonderful, and I am delighted to see everyone joining in. Sure is fun to read and know my family. TD |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Well then - This just might be one of the BEST "I Am" poems I've seen - and we've gone a couple of good rounds with this challenge over the years... I like it lots... I do, I do...  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Aye, Vicky, I must agree with Miss Nan...one of the more indepth pieces we've yet to see...[and man, they're coming out of the woodwork!]  |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
written very well,, and touching..  |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Vicky- you are great. really and truely |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I am the voice of confidence within a heart of insecure I feign contentedness and smile in costume of felicity I feel the sting of loneliness when I succeed in masquerade I touch the child inside of me and wonder where she went astray I fear that I'm not worthy of the acclamations passed my way I cry in solitary world - I cannot let the people see I am the voice of confidence within a heart of insecure ============================= So... that was you in my mirror..... I feel the sting of loneliness when I succeed in masquerade yep...youre writing for two me-girlie... powerful write poetess Vic... I am the voice of confidence within a heart of insecure poetry in motion..that line is indeed. "How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you." |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Vicky, I couldn't pick out a part that really touched me more thatn the others, because all of it did. You can express yourself so wee, my friend. Thank you for being you.  Hugs  Ethel |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
You know, sometimes we're so alike that it almost scares me This one's going in my library Mum ... Even though you're gone ... |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Awesome in it's honesty. And reads like silk. I feel like we've all had a cleansing now. Ed |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
A beautiful write so indicative of many of us. Thank you. |
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Crimson Moon Member
since 2003-07-21
Posts 52NY, USA |
I am the woman no one knows I travel the path no one goes I am the fear that drives This smile that hides The tears in my eyes Beautiful poem it was if for a moment you read my soul.  |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Vicky Your words were so very powerful, yet sad and I am sure so many people could relate to this. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Vicky~ You are the voice in mid-of-night that often gives where others slight You are the friend of no-pretend the one that loves like there's no end~ You are sincere so very dear All that ... and more~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
I am the voice of confidence within a heart of insecure and i am one of those that echo you, beautiful write, and many many could relate |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Vicky, you just gave me more reasons to like you! You are real, you are human, you are friend---and you are talented!  Linda |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Vicky this is just as beautiful as your giving heart. hugs, Chris |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
i like this one a lot...very nicely written..very much said...so many of us want to be the confident person we show, when really we are as insecure as the people we're talking to... enjoyed much... hugs, g I want to run naked in the Blue! |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Vicky, this brought tears to my eyes, for I can see alot of me in these words.You are truly a talented, courageous, and beautiful spirit that has ascended on this earht. angelblueyes |
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x8x_bigmike Member
since 2003-07-08
Posts 130California, USA |
understand the consequence of hiding heart's identity I say I'll show the all of me and let the cards fall where they may I oft' imagine unity - a peace for all humanity _____________________ Great stuff here... Mike _____________________________ |
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