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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA 
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I couldn't look worse inside of the out I know I'll see you, These nails I paint could only scratch the surface I know I won't find you, Remind me why this room is mine since it's filled with you defaced pictures and all, Mocking me through beauty your eyes still lean towards mine photographic standstill, Sick to the bones of what is no more, If I could tear down these walls that watched us evolve, I would. Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
wow..scary, shocking, sad, disturbing, too many words to describe this so I'll settle with great...as usual |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Gem, gem.. I feel this more than you could imagine.. I've just lost a love very recently, myself. Keep them coming, I need the relation. |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
The next step is just that... ... STEP!  One at a time. |
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Ladybug Member
since 2003-06-17
Posts 236Massachusetts |
This is another great write! Wow, I love your style, you have an excellent way of describing things.  Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end... |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
What gives you the right to smile at me from albums and frames To stretch through years so that your shadow casts itself in too many memories To use the word Love when it only ever applied to yourself and not us What gives you the right to linger when I need to forget? ..think of Starwarskid and play Stay young.. [This message has been edited by Aenimal (07-24-2003 01:37 PM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
pain, pain, pain |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Mocking me through beauty your eyes still lean towards mine photographic standstill, Gemma, I wish I knew the right words to say to make you feel better.....I really don't think anyone can, though. It will happen in time, though.  Hugs to you, my little friend  Ethel |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
"These nails I paint could only scratch the surface I know I won't find you," WOW ... this image just blew me away. I really do adore the cool spin you put on your words. You are soooooo good, Lady. |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Sick to the bones of what is no more, If I could tear down these walls that watched us evolve, I would. Whoah, Gem...I know this. I also know walls confine us...tear 'em down, kiddo, if they only be the walls of your mind that hold you back. And then rebuild what YOU want! This rocks! Patricia |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Lots of emotion being released here Gem...seems like you are trying to exhorsise a ghost from the past...thanks for the words... Goldenrose. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
know the feeling, incredibly brutal and honest...leaving an empty ache within.... Your poetry is awesome...thank you for sharing.... |
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