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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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The lies find their way into her mouth Dripped there from the sickness that occupies her She forms them with her tongue Pressing them against the palette and teeth Shaping them into bitter beads Large and small but all, of a peculiar dreadful beauty And she strings them Just so on filaments as fragile as spider web Making for herself The strings that are her currency The strands that make up her curtain The netting that holds her captive |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
yikes! scary but sadly true for many of us.. how did we allow ouselves to be in this precarious position |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Classic wranx..brilliant writing what more can i say? |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
God, you have met the black widow now havent you? How can I do this please? amazing . . . xxoo |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
How many fingers this poem has. What a person will do for "safety"...what net she will self-impose in order to not be without... what she will sell for temporary salvation... what lies she will tell herself, that all is well, as bitter beads of tears fall.... Wranx, I do think I shall put down my pen, and write no more. Not when I can just read yours. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Yes Susie, I have certainly done THAT! Thanks folks for the read. Ed |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Sometimes the best poetry will give you a description of someone in words that drip with feeling. This one sure does! Yikes. I would not want to meet this woman. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
wranx And we often pat her on the head, enjoyed. |
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Ladybug Member
since 2003-06-17
Posts 236Massachusetts |
Wow!!! Everything about this poem is incredible; the imagery, the language, just everything. I really enjoyed this!  Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end... [This message has been edited by Ladybug (07-23-2003 03:16 PM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
She doesn't sound very kissable to me!  Sending you lots of protective white light! lol  Linda |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...a vivid, portrait...so well done! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Shaping them into bitter beads Large and small but all, of a peculiar dreadful beauty And she strings them Just so on filaments as fragile as spider web =========================== very very cool analogy, metaphor and personification Poet Ed ... powerful imagery as well. As always your words leave an impact and make me think. well done  "How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you." |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wow Ed, you amaze me m'friend.... I began to quote my fav lines and found myself quoting the whole poem. this is a  Maree fate is not just |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
The strings that are her currency The strands that make up her curtain The netting that holds her captive My oh my. What else to say except "I'm keeping this!!" hugs, Chris "At one glance |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Wow!! Brilliant write. I really am in awe of your talents sir. What a vivid picture you can paint. TD |
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S Arthur Grey Senior Member
since 2001-03-19
Posts 719woven by a poet's loom |
Odd and interesting change of form at the end. Enjoyed your spider. s.a.g. [This message has been edited by S Arthur Grey (07-24-2003 12:40 AM).] |
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Bonnie j Senior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 1588Ohio |
That ole spider is a sly one. I have a couple poems about the spider. And if the lady is like the spider beware. Good one. Bon-Bon |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
dude what is this? you write a masterpiece and act all casual at work "yeah I posted something today I was actually able to write something on my own..........no duet intended" this is sharp and edged in more than one way damn fantastic write |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Wow...Ed...this is an incredible write! VERY cool stuff here, my friend. This is definitely one of my favorites of yours. Well done! Hugs, ~Vicky "My friends are my estate." |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Thank you friends...for the flatteries, and for...KNOWING Ed "You shouldn't be surprised at what happens next" [This message has been edited by wranx (07-24-2003 11:13 AM).] |
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