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In Telling Of Caravan
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In Telling Of Caravan |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Tell me those tales, while I close my eyes and lay my head on the softness of your voice as it recounts the days of wandering as we were then On sand that drew a dance Of lines across rising dune That in point of east Told us even the lowly grain Was drawn to divine. If I open my eyes as you speak It is to watch the rise and fall Of your chest as you breathe Knowing, that our air is mixed And mingled as we have been On robes or blankets Under vast expanded sky Lit only by the spark of star And those of ours I would pillow you On the silk of my thoughts As I sleep And watch you awake That the tender curves And gentle traces would not Be forgotten As long as I have life And there are Desert rains Please, tell me again [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (06-11-2003 03:56 PM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
This was so utterly beautiful, that any reply of mine would take away from the beauty of it! Swooning, EA |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Beautifully written Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
I would pillow you On the silk of my thoughts Wow, what lovely words! Beautiful piece. hugs to you for this, Chris  "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
beautiful, beautiful, beautiful... I like it all... you are very romantic lately *s M [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (06-11-2003 03:34 PM).] |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
"I would pillow you on the silk of my thoughts?"....You've been spending far too much time in front of the Victoria's Secret store down at the mall boy!!!.....How ya been hair?.... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This is breathtaking! ~Grinning at you~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
EA... thank you for the nice words.. but I seriously doubt that your replies would have detracted from anything I wrote.. Loner... thank you ma'am glad you liked. Nightshade.. hugs back at ya... glad you enjoyed. M.... you are repeating yourself... I didn't realize you had developed a stutter.. lol.. Sincerely.... thank you... nice of you to say such things about a humble offering such as this. Toe.. who said it was outside Victorias I had been hanging around??? If you slip in the back the pillows are much better... lol good to seee you you old coot. N..... lol... glad you enjoyed... now go read Rumi. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
If I open my eyes as you speak It is to watch the rise and fall Of your chest as you breathe Knowing, that our air is mixed And mingled as we have been On robes or blankets Under vast expanded sky Lit only by the spark of star And those of ours ============================= Have mercy.... oh yeah...I need some of what your muse is having.  Im still imagining your voice ... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron...this was so very beautiful...I know I keep saying that...but it is, it is!! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I would pillow you On the silk of my thoughts As I sleep And watch you awake That the tender curves And gentle traces would not Be forgotten As long as I have life And there are Desert rains Please, tell me again Your pen writes romance SO well, Cap'n... *S* You're filling my library... and I'm loving it! *G* So beautiful... *S* |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
OK, I have virtually melted in front of the computer. I got this man in my life who needs to read your words...to see how it is done. He needs to learn by example...no better example than this beautiful verse. Patricia |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...and again ...and again ...and again... |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very romantic you |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I would pillow you On the silk of my thoughts As I sleep And watch you awake That the tender curves And gentle traces would not Be forgotten As long as I have life And there are Desert rains Please, tell me again Oh yes please DO! another keeper Maree |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
STOP IT! I really, really do have some WORK to do this afternoon! But it can wait another day or three.  this is superbly written. This whole series cries to be bound in gold, or love dust...it doesn't matter how you wrap it or unwrap it. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'I would pillow you On the silk of my thoughts As I sleep And watch you awake That the tender curves And gentle traces would not Be forgotten As long as I have life And there are Desert rains' I have willed myself this very thing, many times. Though now, I truly remember very few. But those few...  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
"...while I close my eyes and lay my head on the softness of your voice..." You are a master of atmosphere....beautiful poem! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Romantic Indeed ARCTIC WIND |
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