Journey Through Hell (Dante had it easy)

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Open Poetry #27

Journey Through Hell (Dante had it easy)

Deus
Junior Member

since 2003-07-17

Posts 18
California, US

0 posted 2003-07-18 07:06 PM

I am back now and it’s like I never left
I felt you when I crossed the line; I heard your scream
There was a time when we were both full
So full of life and so full of vibrancies
But now we are dead

I wish I could remember when it happened
Or how
But the smoky glare and drunken glaze,
They all break my stare
I want you to show me what I missed
I want you to tell me what I said
I need you to live

Bent and then shattered
Warm and then frozen
What once was will never be
And what could have been never was

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

1 posted 2003-07-18 07:47 PM

well done

mirror man
Senior Member

since 2001-01-08

Posts 814

2 posted 2003-07-18 08:32 PM

Yes, this is good. Enjoyed.

Deus
Junior Member

since 2003-07-17

Posts 18
California, US

3 posted 2003-07-18 09:10 PM

Thanks ;].

x8x_bigmike
Member

since 2003-07-08

Posts 130
California, USA

4 posted 2003-07-18 09:17 PM

But the smoky glare and drunken glaze,
They all break my stare

____
this line is so true...the part that i cant get over...is the not remembering, the reasons, the things in drunken glaze and smokey glare that led to the despair...great stuff..i related to it alot\

Mike

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

5 posted 2003-07-19 04:39 PM

Deus:

this is perfection!
Dante had it easy . . . yep indeed
Welcome to PIP!
xxoo

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