Wealth? (counterpoint to Sunshine's Plethora)

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Open Poetry #27

Wealth? (counterpoint to Sunshine's Plethora)

Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

0 posted 2003-07-18 04:19 PM

                         Wealth?

                         Or,
                         would all of that
                         purple plum sugar,
                         pent,
                         then spilled out
                         in vent,
                         merely stain
                         the hand
                         that waited
                         too long,
                         in ferment,
                         for just the right
                         sweetness?

                                              © Krawdad  071803
                                       (Thanks for the idea, Sunshine.)

x8x_bigmike
Member

since 2003-07-08

Posts 130
California, USA

1 posted 2003-07-18 04:23 PM

purple plum sugar,
pent,

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I love that line...I wrote a poem, Fresh Plums...take a look at it...I was going for the taste you achieved in this description...great stuff..

Mike

Soleil Noir
Senior Member

since 2001-12-19

Posts 688
USA

2 posted 2003-07-18 04:27 PM

You did Plethora a great service
by the point, counterpoint, Krawdad.

Toerag
Member Ascendant

since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

3 posted 2003-07-18 05:02 PM

I've brought life into this world,
I've taken away life too,
The first was truly wonderful,
Hope the second never happens to you.

I've gained wealth and money,
I can purchase material things,
Can't take any with me,
Nor the pleasures they supposedly bring.

I've seen my children grow healthy,
Thru laughter and joys and tears,
God they grew so quickly,
What's happened to all the years?

True wealth is not measured in money,
It's not what you have in the banks,
The laughter and love of family and friends,
For this wealth I truly give thanks.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

4 posted 2003-07-18 05:05 PM

Nice come-back and interesting slant!

Warm hugs,
EA

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

5 posted 2003-07-18 06:53 PM

Always two sides to a glass...a thought...a desire. Well done Sir. Counterpoint me anytime you want!

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

6 posted 2003-07-19 04:05 AM

merely stain
the handthat waited
too long,
in ferment,
for just the right
sweetness?

that's just fantastic writing krawdad

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