Remaking sense (A collaberation with Soleil Noir)

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wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn

0 posted 2003-07-18 11:21 AM

My memories lie quietly
        with heartbeats ticking time
in the darkness waiting
        ever so
patiently, though
        cavernously, through my veins
to be called upon
        unexpectedly, harshly, abruptly,
                 by the nemesis, demanding
an explanation

        but silence is my key in
whiling away the time
         for the good and the bad are
merging with one another

         reveries

remaking,
reforming themselves into
          particles of perfection, and
some semblance of sense

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

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By the Seaside

1 posted 2003-07-18 11:24 AM

but silence is my key in
whiling away the time
         for the good and the bad are
merging with one another

         reveries

ummmmm, hmmmmm!!  Looking good you two~

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2003-07-18 11:29 AM

wranx and Soleil Noir,
Time tastes all things, enjoyed.

Soleil Noir
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3 posted 2003-07-18 11:41 AM

Thank you Blues, and Sy - having a request to be paired with Wranx was a dream come true...that he would say "yes" just goes to show miracles happen!

Martie

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4 posted 2003-07-18 11:47 AM

Great dueting, Soleil and wranx...much enjoyed the meld!

Soleil Noir
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5 posted 2003-07-18 01:43 PM

Thank you Martie...you'd blink twice if we told you that it was serve, return, love. LOL...

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space

6 posted 2003-07-18 02:06 PM

A seemless merge. I like it! I like it!

vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...

7 posted 2003-07-18 02:21 PM

Love this, you two...excellent duet.
Hugs to you both...
"So here I am with pockets full of good intentions
But none of them will comfort me tonight..." ~Carpenters

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

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just out of reach

8 posted 2003-07-18 03:00 PM

Oooh, love this I do. Congratulations wranx and Soleil Noir on a duet at it's finest!! hugs, Chris

"At one glance
I love you
With a thousand hearts."

— Mihri Hatun, Turkish poet

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light

9 posted 2003-07-18 03:39 PM

"merging with one another"--yes, indeed!

Warm hugs,
EA

scorpio
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since 2002-10-02

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right...there

10 posted 2003-07-18 03:55 PM

An inspiring write by two fine poets...much enjoyed your collaboration..

believe in what your heart feels...

serenity blaze
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11 posted 2003-07-18 05:05 PM

This is like...a quiet insomnia.

I just got the feeling of staring up at the ceiling.

OH. Maybe it's because I have been, huh?

A gentle weave of gentle poet thought.

Dare I say, Encore?

x8x_bigmike
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since 2003-07-08

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12 posted 2003-07-18 05:14 PM

reveries

remaking,
reforming themselves into
particles of perfection

___________
the breaks and the diction...just amazing..

Mike

Duncan
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13 posted 2003-07-18 08:13 PM

"        but silence is my key in
whiling away the time
         for the good and the bad are
merging with one another

         reveries

remaking,
reforming themselves into
          particles of perfection, and
some semblance of sense"

Had no idea what this pairing might bring.  I really, really like this you two!!!!  I wanted to quote the whole poem but restrained myself.

Patricia
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since 2003-04-06

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14 posted 2003-07-18 08:38 PM

but silence is my key in
whiling away the time
         for the good and the bad are
merging with one another

         reveries

remaking,
reforming themselves into
          particles of perfection, and
some semblance of sense

Nodding in understanding...spent 16 years trying to make some semblance of sense.  The particles disintegrated with dissolution.

Your combination of talent resulted in one remarkable piece.  Encore!

Patricia

wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn

15 posted 2003-07-18 11:10 PM

Thanks everyone for reading and commenting.

LOL...Even I had no idea what this pairing would bring!

T'was easy tho....all I did was toss out some random phrases from my "Poetry Made Easy" book, and Soleil Noir made some semblance of sense with them.

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

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New York

16 posted 2003-07-18 11:11 PM

Good God yes . . .
this is amazing you guys truly
xxoo

passing shadows
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displaced

17 posted 2003-07-19 01:40 AM

wow...everyone already quoted my favorite lines...so I'll leave with "wow"

Dark Angel
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18 posted 2003-07-19 11:50 PM

Soleil and wranx...A most wonderful collaboration....enjoyed muchly

Maree.

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

brian sites
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since 2002-06-25

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19 posted 2003-07-20 12:40 PM

a fine sculpture
played
fourhands

wonderful circle

hey Ed?
I just bought Volume 2 of PME
you can have it after Im done

a bow to miss Noir

vandana

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20 posted 2003-07-20 04:41 PM

enjoyed

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