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Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

0 posted 2003-07-17 06:04 PM

She is going on the long road to wherever
the toxic air is thick with her regret
layers of meaning passing through her notice
chill on morning covers from last night’s draft

Missing the edge that ate the moon like supper
so far to go to find that midnight pool
only a line that moves with desperation
and the sound of quiet water far below

Let it pass she tells inside of eager
his lips are dew on sandy beach of time
your waiting for the water like a river in a drought
and release is on the other side of out

Over the edge of sleep she hears him calling
of something wild and winged in bright below
the night she now releases to her pillow
while taking the elevator to get home

Deus
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since 2003-07-17

Posts 18
California, US

1 posted 2003-07-17 06:06 PM

Impressive.

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

2 posted 2003-07-17 06:22 PM

Feeling the longitude and latitude of discontent here...a silent anguish.
Impressively written. TD

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2003-07-17 06:37 PM

I am in awe of your writing skills poetess Martie.
Extremely well done.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~ I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before ~

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

4 posted 2003-07-17 06:52 PM

Let it pass she tells inside of eager
his lips are dew on sandy beach of time
your waiting for the water like a river in a drought
and release is on the other side of out

You write of the inner sorrow exquisitely.
It's an honor to read you, and I thank you
for all your treasured gifts and flawless poetry.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2003-07-17 07:59 PM

MartieSis~
You are so remarkably word-lovely~

'Missing the edge that ate the moon like supper
so far to go to find that midnight pool
only a line that moves with desperation
and the sound of quiet water far below'

Memorably beautiful, my friend~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2003-07-17 09:11 PM

Your writing either
keeps one from breathing
or taking a breath
or just catching it
in hold...

yes, it is just like that...

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

7 posted 2003-07-17 09:14 PM

Martie - as always...

BC

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

8 posted 2003-07-17 09:26 PM

"Missing the edge that ate the moon like supper
so far to go to find that midnight pool
only a line that moves with desperation
and the sound of quiet water far below

Let it pass she tells inside of eager
his lips are dew on sandy beach of time
your waiting for the water like a river in a drought
and release is on the other side of out"

Martie...you are just SO COOL! The images that your words
create in my brain are amazing...and so uniquely you.
I absolutely LOVE this!
Love and hugs to you, friend...

"So here I am with pockets full of good intentions
But none of them will comfort me tonight..." ~Carpenters
[This message has been edited by vlraynes (07-17-2003 09:26 PM).]

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

9 posted 2003-07-18 12:22 PM

Deus...Thank you for that one word.

TD...Your replies are always appreciated for there thought.

Nancy...I make the awe into a ball and throw it back at you.

Lori...Your reply made me feel special...thank you.

Marge/sis...:loveyou:

Karilea...Breathing is one of the most important things we do.

Bill...yep!

Vicky...It's too hot to be cool, but I thank you for the kind you mean. Love and hugs back.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

10 posted 2003-07-18 09:25 AM

Missing the edge that ate the moon like supper
so far to go to find that midnight pool
only a line that moves with desperation
and the sound of quiet water far below

Let it pass she tells inside of eager
his lips are dew on sandy beach of time
your waiting for the water like a river in a drought
and release is on the other side of out

=====================================

And your poetry tis the oasis in the drought.
Love the imagery and assonance of your word play Martie-girl. Very cool write indeed.

"I'm good at two things and this is the other one."

C. Jaks

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

11 posted 2003-07-18 09:30 AM

Over the edge of sleep she hears him calling
of something wild and winged in bright below
the night she now releases to her pillow
while taking the elevator to get home

Martie, you are absolutely awesome...
and your writing is, too.

Hugs

Ethel

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

12 posted 2003-07-18 09:31 AM

Martie
You always impress me with your write.

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

13 posted 2003-07-18 09:54 AM

Missing the edge that ate the moon like supper

When I grow up I wanna write just like you Martie!! This is incredible. hugs, Chris

"At one glance
I love you
With a thousand hearts."

— Mihri Hatun, Turkish poet

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

14 posted 2003-07-18 10:01 AM

Missing the edge that ate the moon like supper

a favorite line...but as always each line brings me back to many places I have been

lovely, Martie
M

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

15 posted 2003-07-18 04:45 PM

Great poem...so many wonderful lines...all tied together gracefuly.
Eric

x8x_bigmike
Member

since 2003-07-08

Posts 130
California, USA

16 posted 2003-07-18 04:49 PM

Over the edge of sleep she hears him calling
_______-
Great line...i keep reading this over and over...its definition is so tied in expereince...great stuff

Mike

Goodknight
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since 2002-06-15

Posts 2386
Ohio, USA

17 posted 2003-07-18 08:47 PM

Martie - this is just terrific and I shall read it again and again as it tells me things I did not know - Paul

Ratleader

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since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

18 posted 2003-07-27 11:24 AM

So enigmatic, this one, so many dimensions in one poem that it's hard to hold them all. The way you show the flow of emotion, make us feel it with you, is just stunning....

"Over the edge of sleep she hears him calling
of something wild and winged in bright below
the night she now releases to her pillow
while taking the elevator to get home"

....and this -- the levels of it...you weave magic carpets, Martie. And to think I almost missed this, by being gone at the wrong time!

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suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

19 posted 2003-07-27 05:24 PM

Let it pass she tells inside of eager
his lips are dew on sandy beach of time
your waiting for the water like a river in a drought
and release is on the other side of out

Over the edge of sleep she hears him calling

So many emotions course through me as I read this... including awe at your abilities to paint so vividly with words. *S* Excellent!

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