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A Memory of Her
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A Memory of Her |
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Deus Junior Member
since 2003-07-17
Posts 18California, US |
Crash landing in my chest, leave a scar but not a bruise Scrape the insides, collect every last bit, I’m going nowhere Planes and then plains, a stillness we felt together Dunes and dust and sand, always with the sand, crystal white Frailties and discontent with both of us to blame Inverted colors rolling in waves- never eager...always eager The awkward silence and pause, a dot a dot a dot Turning angles and breaking squares, don’t you hate this routine? I’m not a poet and you’re not a romantic, drop yours and I’ll drop mine I’ve never been uncovered, nobody knows completely, I like it this way Just like a statue, encryptions of artful deceit and broken words And in the end I’ll have nothing left to say because it will all be written They’ll look at you and see my past, they’ll see what I never could The prospect of reflection, mirror images for eternity But no worries there, no worries here, it will all be alright It will all be ok, because my eye’s on the prize and I don’t remember you at all I’m saying goodbye tonight just as I did the last and I’ll put it all to pad I’ll put it all to bed, alone and resting like a sentence without a period Like a paragraph without pause |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
Welcome to Passions!  This is an excellent poem! I like it very much! I hope to see you around.  Kielo |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Welcome to Passions. This was a really strong write. I look forward to reading more of your poetry and your responses to the other poets here. Please check your e-mail for a special greeting from all of us here at Passions. Ethel..garysgirl Moderator/Passions In Poetry |
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Deus Junior Member
since 2003-07-17
Posts 18California, US |
Thanks for the kind words =]. I've only been here for a few minutes haha, but I already like it. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
I read this to music in my head welcome and keep singing these songs |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions, William. This was an especially telling line, "I’m not a poet and you’re not a romantic, drop yours and I’ll drop mine" and spoke volumes. Looking forward to reading more of your work. Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen? |
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Deus Junior Member
since 2003-07-17
Posts 18California, US |
Thanks Sunshine =]. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Deus Some wonderful lines, enjoyed the read and welcome. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Welcome to Passions...a very intense and professional write...looking forward to reading more of you. Lee J. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
William~ Welcome to Passions~ 'I’ll put it all to pad' That's just the thing to do, so that we may enjoy it too~ 'resting like a sentence without a period' A real killer line of thought ! *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Nicely done "not a poet"...welcome to our world |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
They’ll look at you and see my past, they’ll see what I never could Welcome to Passions! Enjoyed your first post very much. Have fun here. Chris ~ "There shall be eternal summer in the grateful heart." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS! Very nicely written entrance post! I look forward to seeing more of your work. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~If you haven't heard the sunset, |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Yes, no period, no pause clever and nicely done. Welcome to PiP from one "no poet" to another ~wranx "Don't be surprised at what happens next" |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Deus I enjoyed your first post...welcome to Passions! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome write here, I can relate! Welcome to Passions  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Crash landing in my chest, leave a scar but not a bruise Scrape the insides, collect every last bit, I’m going nowhere Planes and then plains, a stillness we felt together Dunes and dust and sand, always with the sand, crystal white I enjoyed this for all the right reasons and perhaps the wrong ones too. Such a heart breaking beauty of a poem. Thanks for getting up close, in my face! This was so good, and worth reading over a couple dozen times. Please stay and post more, it's been a pleasure. Welcome Deus~ [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (07-17-2003 06:33 PM).] |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Welcome to Passions! A very hard line taken in this write, well done in intensity and presentation. Looking forward to writing with you. ThisDiamond |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I enjoyed the way you put it to pad. Welcome to Passions. |
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