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The long and winding ache
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The long and winding ache |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA 
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Funny how I took down the photographs long before the end Yet still you hang ugly as most expensive art in forefront of mind Since we didn't last the forever wanted then why should this long and winding ache. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
kid...the ache lasts a lot longer than it should, but it does get better... nice piece... |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Beautiful piece! |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
"Since we didn't last the forever wanted then why should this long and winding ache." wow! this really grabbed me. you nailed it. |
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x8x_bigmike Member
since 2003-07-08
Posts 130California, USA |
8 weeks later, it hits me more when i dream than anything...when forever is a rational thought, the loss of forever seems to stick with you through the rest of your life...but for me its the fuel for my poetry...the longer time passes the more you remember the good over the bad if you were truly in love... i emphathize though... Mike |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Gem- this one is perfect. too badd you can't just wave your wand and make him go 'poof' ~The shivering peanut~ Don't it allways seem to go, |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Very descriptively emotional poem.. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
It doesn't last forever, just long enough for you to believe it will. Ache and then remember to live..your friend Hyp O. Crit |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
i like the ache, actually, isnt that weird? |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
How I relate....this is exceptionally well penned, I love your unique style and images. This is a keeper~ Melissa Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Yet still you hang ugly as most expensive art in forefront of mind ========================= Whoa ... and wow ... and damn. poetic impact and irony at its succinct best. well done poetess gem. Well ... OK ... but you have to wash it first. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
ahh gem gem - that ache . . . God you know some days I wake up and still think I am at home. I dont know how long that ache lasts and what it will take to get rid of it but I do know how you feel and can empathize very much so. I guess one of two things: 1. we find something or someone else to take our minds off of it 2. we take more meds lol ok seriously . . . I was serious awesome lines missy xxoo |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
The ache is what makes it real ...if only the other side ached as well. take two of these  and hug me in the morning! oxoxox |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
just a beautifully sad write gemma...you know I can understand |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Wow...powerfully, yet beautifully said, gemma. Nicely done.  Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Old_Shoe_New_Laces Junior Member
since 2003-06-16
Posts 31 |
I know well the infinite ache. The first stanza made this work for me. Enjoyed. |
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