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VOE
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since 2003-07-10

Posts 119
From the land of Camelot

0 posted 2003-07-14 05:23 AM

Relentless summer heat is hanging
thick in cloudless sky
Bringing with it memories
of a bygone hot July
Sudden thoughts of you ignite
a secret hidden flame
There's nothing left to do
but pray for rain...

I pray for rain to drown the need
to see your sun-kissed face
To wash away the times we shared
within our summer place
But most of all, I pray for rain
when each new day's begun
It's hard to be without you
in the sun...

Predictions have been cast
they call for more of hot and dry
With moisture set at zero
what's this falling from my eye?
But life goes on in blazing sun
the heat lays bare the pain
It feels the perfect time
to pray for rain...

I speak from the Voice Of Experience

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

1 posted 2003-07-14 05:35 AM

I love it when it rains and when the tradewinds are blowing about 15 to 25. James

VOE
Member

since 2003-07-10

Posts 119
From the land of Camelot

2 posted 2003-07-14 05:37 AM

Thanks James, and so do I. Sometimes the rain feels like it washes life clean to new beginnings, too.

I speak from the Voice Of Experience

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

3 posted 2003-07-14 05:49 AM

VOE...I LOVE this! The title caught my eye,
and I was not disappointed by what I found inside.
An excellent write, and I can't wait to read more from you.
Welcome!
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

VOE
Member

since 2003-07-10

Posts 119
From the land of Camelot

4 posted 2003-07-14 06:53 AM

Thank you Vicky, and after seeing where you hail from, I understand how the word 'Rain' might catch your eye!!!!! I imagine you pray for rain sometimes, eh?? Thank you, and I appreciate your 'warm' welcome!!

I speak from the Voice Of Experience

Edder
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since 2003-04-02

Posts 671

5 posted 2003-07-14 10:46 AM

excellent! very nice flow to this. welcome to PIP!

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2003-07-14 10:48 AM

Welcome to Passions, VOE. I have a feeling you're going to like it around here. Please, check your E-mail for a Special Greeting!

Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen?

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

7 posted 2003-07-14 10:57 AM

Voe
I love this poem.
I'm really going to enjoy
reading more of you. You are
fitting right in around here. I
appreciate the replies you are making
to others poetry. That's a very
good start, Voe. And, I would
like to give you a big
welcome to Passions

Hugs

Ethel....garysgirl

[This message has been edited by garysgirl (07-14-2003 11:05 AM).]

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

8 posted 2003-07-14 11:11 AM

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!
I very much enjoyed your beautiful opening post!
Looking forward to seeing more of your work!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~If you haven't heard the sunset,
you haven't been listening.~

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

9 posted 2003-07-14 11:14 AM

Welcome!

Nicely penned thoughts

~wranx

Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

10 posted 2003-07-14 11:43 AM

Nicely done...some beautiful images here...welcome to our world

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

11 posted 2003-07-14 11:55 AM

I'll help you with a rain dance

Welcome!

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

12 posted 2003-07-14 12:08 PM

That was a wonderful poem! Welcome to Passions! May the rains come and wash that man right out of your hair!--and wash all your troubles away!

Here's hoping for a brand new fresh start!

Warm welcoming hugs,
Earth Angel

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

13 posted 2003-07-14 12:59 PM

Welcome, VOE...I'm wishing for rain too, not just a drizzle, but a good old storm. Enjoyed your poem!

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

14 posted 2003-07-14 01:01 PM

Hi VOE, you snuck in here while I was sleeping...good to read you and welcome

You'll like it here, and I have a feeling I'll like you being here

Great write; I can relate well...

poet25
Junior Member

since 2003-06-17

Posts 18
PE, Canada

15 posted 2003-07-14 01:04 PM

The poem was quite weel written it makes one think of a world of freedom where no longer do our beasts of burden haunt us, and we feel like we could take on the world even for that single moment.

VOE
Member

since 2003-07-10

Posts 119
From the land of Camelot

16 posted 2003-07-14 01:18 PM

Hello Edder, Sunshine, garysgirl, Enchantress, wranx, Paula Finn, Midnitesun, Earth Angel, Martie, passing shadows, and poet25!!

What a truly wonderful welcome I have received from you all here, and I thought I would thank you all at once because I am happily overwhelmed!! Yes, I believe I will be most happy in your company here, and we shall spend many good times enjoying each other's work. There is talent beyond belief here, and I look forward to tapping the flow and exchanging ideas, so once again...

Thank you, and now, pick up your pens, and let's do what we do best, eh??

~~VOE~~

I speak from the Voice Of Experience

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

17 posted 2003-07-14 02:33 PM

VOE,

Seriously! Stop praying for rain! I am drowning over here!

Welcome to passions, what a fine start you have graced us with! I really loved your poem and look forward to seeing many more!

Susan C.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

18 posted 2003-07-14 02:47 PM

VOE
You write well and I really enjoyed it.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

19 posted 2003-07-14 03:19 PM

I pray for rain to drown the need
to see your sun-kissed face
To wash away the times we shared
within our summer place
But most of all, I pray for rain
when each new day's begun
It's hard to be without you
in the sun...

Predictions have been cast
they call for more of hot and dry
With moisture set at zero
what's this falling from my eye?
But life goes on in blazing sun
the heat lays bare the pain
It feels the perfect time
to pray for rain...

===========================

This is superb poetry...wonderful employ of rhyme, imagery, personify and extended metaphor to carry out your intended theme..
the repetative line worked perfectly.
Excellent writing..welcome to poetry land...
so nice to have you here with us.

jm

JingleBear
Member

since 2003-05-08

Posts 76
Pennsylvania, USA

20 posted 2003-07-14 03:50 PM

I love the rain! :-)

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

21 posted 2003-07-14 03:51 PM

Hi there, this is wonderful. It is somehow easier in the rain, to be without..
Sandra

El_Campeador
Senior Member

since 2003-01-29

Posts 761
Ohio, USA

22 posted 2003-07-14 06:23 PM

Welcome to PIP. I hope you will be blessed here.

We've gotten a lot of rain the past week here in Ohio. We don't really need anymore

Good poem. I enjoyed reading this.

~El Campeador

“We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson

scorpio
Member Ascendant

since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

23 posted 2003-07-14 09:12 PM

Welcome to passions in poetry...I enjoyed your first post..

believe in what your heart feels...

KoKo
Senior Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 995
Inside the shadow's shadow

24 posted 2003-07-14 10:05 PM

The title of this remindedme of my favorite Tool song, so of course I had to read it, and I'm glad I did. I totally enjoyed your first post. Keep em comin!

I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man.
--Chang Tzu

VOE
Member

since 2003-07-10

Posts 119
From the land of Camelot

25 posted 2003-07-15 05:22 AM

Hello Susan, Seymore, Janet Marie, JingleBear, Catalinamoon, El_Campeador, scorpio, and KoKo!

Just wanted to let you know that your replies and warm welcomes are very much appreciated by this poetess, and I thank you!
Also, to those of you who are drowning in your weather, I promise to stop doing my rain dance now, even though where I am is hot, hot, hot!!
It's a joy to be here, to share with you all, and have the opportunity to make good friends with very talented writers.

Thank you once again......

~~VOE~~

I speak from the Voice Of Experience

Ariana
Senior Member

since 2000-10-08

Posts 571
Orlando, Florida

26 posted 2003-07-15 10:12 PM

VOE

I love the words you wrote:

"But life goes on in blazing sun
the heat lays bare the pain
It feels the perfect time
to pray for rain..."

Very moving and descriptive. Enjoyed very much and, by the way, Welcome to Passions!

Ariana

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

27 posted 2003-07-15 10:15 PM

I love the rain,
and your poetry.

VOE
Member

since 2003-07-10

Posts 119
From the land of Camelot

28 posted 2003-07-16 02:32 AM

Thank you Ariana, and I imagine that where you are is hot right now!! All the more reason to go lay by your pool!! Enjoy!!

Thank you Kaoru, and it's always nice to know that your words brought pleasure to friends!! (I love the rain, too!)

~~V~~

[This message has been edited by VOE (07-16-2003 02:34 AM).]

Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

29 posted 2003-07-30 06:18 AM

I've missed this I'm sorry!!! and I love your "location" I'm right next door to you yanno..in avalon

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

[This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (07-31-2003 03:31 PM).]

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

30 posted 2003-07-31 09:28 AM

D -Dog Day afternoons . . .
you have penned this beautifully!
xxoo

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

31 posted 2003-07-31 10:37 AM

this was indeed a magnificent write...

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

32 posted 2003-07-31 02:33 PM

gorgeous gorgeous write! this was brilliant
written, perfect rhyming, and excellent
phrasing. makes me wish i had wrote it!

welcome to passions, and again beautiful
write!

take care
amy

"love is like a butterfly--
if you chase it,
it will surely fly away,instead
hold it close and watch it grow into
something beautiful"
~me~

Velociraptor1
Junior Member

since 2003-07-23

Posts 14
Australia

33 posted 2003-07-31 05:57 PM

I love when it rain at night you can just here the sprinkles bagging the roof Nice poem it was interesting

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