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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... 
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Stripped what the hell is wrong with you how could you be so unaware or is it that you just don't care about the damage that you've done or maybe you're the only one who matters in your tiny mind but let me tell you this, my 'friend' It's you who'll lose out in the end and find yourself alone one day when everything and everyone you've ever claimed to truly love has seen through your transparent lies and all the selfish alibis when, suddenly, you find yourself, alone, pathetic, crawling back in search of happiness you lack don't cry to me your tale of tears I know the hurt - I know the fears you've taught me well I've lived the hell of loving without love's return and worst of all I've felt the pain brought on by anger unrestrained and DAMN YOU! you have stripped me bare no more compassion do I wear emotions flow this wrath I show it's not the me I want to be it takes control invades my soul and kills the spirit deep within for letting the emotions win damn ME! ~vlraynes "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truly met the poet. ~vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (07-13-2003 11:22 PM).] |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Vicky...you've got the edge on this one...strong spirit feeling, and a touch of anger...that's good and sometimes needed. Well done!  |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
deathly ire m'lady you rail a tale of methyl in rhyme better aired and shared  Don't tell me to get a life -- I have one on backorder. |
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DozenRoses4UV Junior Member
since 2003-06-03
Posts 16 |
Very well put my friend. Very well put indeed. Love you gal. DozenRoses4UV |
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DozenRoses4UV Junior Member
since 2003-06-03
Posts 16 |
Forgot to check add thread to library. |
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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Still speechless. You write angry very well, and I'm extremely happy for you that you finally found a way to get it out *hugs* maybe there'll be more in the future? Now remember, you're not supposed to bottle things up. What you're feeling will come out whether you want it to or not, and like as not it'll come out in ways that you dont want it to (see? I have been listening). *grins* Loved it Mum  [This message has been edited by Skyfire (07-14-2003 01:13 AM).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Sounds like you have a baad apple...there's new one's in the super market...James |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 you go girl!remind me not to make you mad |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Hi Vicki Good to get that out of your system, have witnessed similar events... now you know what to look for and sad to say you'll be more prepared on what you can expect out there... [This message has been edited by ecrivan (07-14-2003 01:40 AM).] |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
 Wow..... just..... wow..... I can describe this is four words. "Powerful," and "eyes widen slowly." Maybe I should add "A look of horror spread across my face as I read this..... it's beautiful."*BUGS* Will they consider me bitter if I add it to my library? Kielo |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Way to go, Vicky.....I hope that the one these words are intended for, will see this poem. You said it very well. Hugs to you, Lady Ethel |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
just read it again  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Well Miss Vicky--this is just "blazing"! And I say better out, than "in". Smiling. Me SO proud of you. (and it feels GOOD, don't it?) love ya lady! and I'll be around--just gotta give the old "buttocks" a break from this chair. (I've just decided to give it a break from EVERYTHING.) I exit, chuckling... |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
Now...that's telling him! Wonderful write! |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
A lot of fire in this write. Now, that it's out, take a deep breath. I like it. Melton |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I'm glad I'm not in THIS pair of shoes... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Dear darlin' Vicky, No DAMN You! No, not ever! You're not in a very good place at the moment and you are just being human! This is a real, raw write!--and you put it all out there with panache! Sending you warm hugs and healing lights, Linda |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
VickyFriend~ Whew ! I'm with Karilea here ... glad my foot doesn't fit the slipper~ Quite the angered emote ... but, seems you've spit it out ... I hope~ Not quite sure what to think ... but sending anyhow~*Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
Hoo-Yeah Chicky! You spit it all out! This is the best damn angry write I've read in a long time..! Good Girl! Purge the poison! Love it! bunch-o-hugs! g |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
There is no greater wrath they say than a woman scorned, and I think you just proved that the saying holds true Vicky. Good for you! His loss. |
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