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Open Poetry #27

Pressure (Haiku)

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2003-07-13 03:24 PM

To feel the pressure
As you calmly drop on me
I can barely breathe.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

1 posted 2003-07-13 04:02 PM

God you know - this is amazing . . .
bittersweet indeed
awesome writing
xxoo

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

2 posted 2003-07-14 08:51 PM

Interesting, how the pressure effects our breathing.

Nice haiku, you~

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

3 posted 2003-07-14 09:07 PM

This can read a few ways..

a haunting act of force
a beautiful act inspiring breathlessness
or having a really fat lover

Excellent either way grins

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

4 posted 2003-07-14 09:14 PM

LOL at Raph's reply

he made me forget my comment!

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