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Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2003-07-13 02:08 PM

A glimmering metropolis,
doomed.
Roaming metallic
technology.

They are marked
with several melted
chrome scars.

That is how we
identify the real between
the things that we've
created.

Have you ever wondered
if streetlights are becoming our
northern stars?
The lamps seem to be all we
can see, the pollution of light
dims
the stars.

They walk,
restless.. Not
programed to sleep.
We
have labeled ourselves as gods.
And merely human,
we wouldn't survive our
futuristic children..

A metropolis,
proves that all that shimmers
must surely fade, someday.

Jennis#1
Member

since 2003-07-08

Posts 112
IL, Usa

1 posted 2003-07-13 02:10 PM

Outsanding poems. I hope that you will visit my poems. My user name is Jennis#1.

-Jenn

keep on writting more poems

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

2 posted 2003-07-13 02:22 PM

"doomed.
Roaming metallic
technology.

They are marked
with several melted
chrome scars."
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Wow, well expressed, very poignant with clever images.

Melissa

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

3 posted 2003-07-13 02:35 PM

Have you ever wondered
if streetlights are becoming our
northern stars?
The lamps seem to be all we
can see, the pollution of light
dims
the stars.

Very good writing. It was like I was looking
at a long street with streetlights all along it.
Very good.