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One True Evil _________(repost Rebel style for garysgirl)
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One True Evil _________(repost Rebel style for garysgirl) |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia 
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There is only one true evil she said She said there is only one The one true evil she said The fish separated from the stream the bird that doesn’t sing the scorpion sans sting one true evil she said she said the man disconnected the separated one the man disconnected from the universe the man is the evil one the fish out of the stream the disconnection is the evil she said the disconnected is the evil one I am the evil she spoke of I am the disconnected one I am the salmon that doesn’t swim The sparrow without a din I am the man the evil one i am the evil she spoke of the wolf that doesn’t cry I am the evil she spoke of The one true evil she said I am the disconnected one I am the one true evil The evil she spoke of I am I am the evil she spoke of I am I am the evil The one True She spoke to me of evil I was the one dis connected evil Don't tell me to get a life -- I have one on backorder. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Awesome style, and a great write.  |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
good write bernie  A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Thanks for reposting it. I loved it, and Ethel will too, when she sees it If art is still inside, I feel it |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Thank you, Local Reb, for reposting this. You know that I love this style. I'm going to save it and study it. LOL "If I know there's no possible way I can change something....I push it to the back room |
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Dylan New Member
since 2003-07-12
Posts 7 |
nightmarish, very clever, much enjoyed this read. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Keep teaching. Us. |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
yes, glad you reposted this.Good work, as usual. Jason |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Rebel........That's why I likes ya! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
the wolf that doesn't cry yeah...sigh |
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Temptress
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
..can't explain what you did, and why I love it..but I do..love it that is. Sorry..my block won't even let me write a presentable response. Just know that I enjoyed this..and that I understand it. You could hurt me with your bare hands. You could hurt me using the sharp edge of what you say. JEWEL |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Good God this is brilliance LR truly xxoo |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Kaoru -- thankyou for the words and smile Bernie -- you smile an awful lot -- makes me wonder what you've been up to  thankyou..Wind -- *bow* gracias Ethel -- somehow I thought you might like this ...  thanksDylan -- yeah, nightmarish is probably a pretty good word -- thankyou Sunshine -- thankyou m'lady  Jason -- your acknowledgement is appreciated Martie -- reciprocal respect  Don't tell me to get a life -- I have one on backorder. [This message has been edited by Local Rebel (07-13-2003 12:32 PM).] |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
dixie chick  jenn -- I don't know whatchu did but you did what you did and you did -- and I thank you! lectricladylander -- your esteem is cherished -- hugszzzzz backatcha Don't tell me to get a life -- I have one on backorder. |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
Gulp! This one fills the mind to over flowing. Amazing write here. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
enjoyed your style M |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
should I be reading you? hope you aren't going to get my soul into any more trouble than it's already in.... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
The evil she spoke of I am I am the evil she spoke of I am But you're not totally without charm. *evil grin* I'm glad you reposted this... you're always connected poetically. *S* |
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ambrish Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 257India |
great style |
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Carolina Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 224Myrtle Beach, SC |
I love this one, LR! Of course, I always love it Rebel-style  |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
I'd love to count but I wonder how many different words were actually used in this poem? You seem to have done a lot of repetition. It's probably not an accident, but I'm having a hard time understanding what all the repetition is supposed to do. Is it just for the sake of style? Or is it supposed to have a certain effect? It's interesting. Disconnection is evil... hmm... the scorpion without a sting, the fish out of the water, the bird that doesn't sing? So to be evil is to be detached from your nature? "Disconnected?" Maybe I'm having a bit of a tough time with this and if so I apologize... would love to know in more detail what you mean in this poem, it's rather intriguing. Parasite Poets are the unacknowledged legislators of the world. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Great write! Unique, thought-provoking--and very creative! An interesting read, Dear Rebel With A Cause!  Warm hugs, EA |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
ah, I remember this, and the story you once told, I do believe she was a smart woman, who even though departing, was connected... is that not the question that lives inside us all...are you connected? so...are you? .....*shrug* been thinking bout you, on my knees...even dreamed you...odd seeing as how I never dream...sigh... great thought provoking write |
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