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Unhappily Ever After
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Unhappily Ever After |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone 
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He read me like a fairy tale a prince of hidden knowledge true He led me to the holy grail a portrait of real love he drew. He touched me as a white knight should so gallant and so charming he It wrote so well, he played it good till my whole world was only we. He even brought a slipper in of course it fit my foot just so No cleaning of an ashy bin just love that caused a heart to glow. But soon the fairy tale turned Grimm no happy ever after here One day I looked and saw just him a frog who hid his likeness clear. (I've kissed him now a thousand times he's yet to change before my eyes) |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
That certainly is one Grimm fairy tale. Maybe some fairy dust will do the trick! Warm hugs for a hurtin' heart, EA |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
The happy ending lies within...always. Great poem! Eric |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
this is so well done - a sad twist on the classic and you write it very well - Paul |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
I hate it when that happens... If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
nice writing thank you for the words... goldenrose. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
He touched me as a white knight should so gallant and so charming he It wrote so well, he played it good till my whole world was only we. Sweet poetess...this is quite a touching write and I feel as though I have lived it...sometime. Chris "The years have seen my life through someone else's eyes....but now, it's.. |
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anwaarhassan Member
since 2003-07-09
Posts 181Menifee, CA |
Well written...I like the style...especially the underlying fairy tale theme...well done!! Anwaar |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Sandra~~~Enjoyed very much. I sure hope one day that frog becomes your prince.RIB-IT I really enjoy your rhyme scheme. Thanks for sharing...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" [This message has been edited by Paul Wilson (07-12-2003 06:21 AM).] |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
This is most excellent and I love the word play! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
catalinamoon - you still write as well as ever, sadness though I feel when reading this... BC |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Sandra..what a wonderful write! I so much enjoyed the read this afternoon. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~If you haven't heard the sunset, |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sandra...I used to believe in princes, but found humans so much more beautiful and real. So many have lived your poem, including me...you wrote it well!  |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Sandra: this is brilliant xxoo |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The Grimm Brothers salute you! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
this frog is ruthless as he strikes, i've counted numerous victims, is yours big fat ugly and strannge looking, but you just got sonnetized? i can more than relate, girlfriend |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
great job, i really liked it, and i don't usually like rhyme, but this was pretty good.  riley *the bloody tide comes in on the shore, time after time* |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Sandra, you are back in good form. I understand this one and enjoyed the comparisons of real and fantasy. Hugss M |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sandra, this is so sad, but yet beautiful. I'm going to keep it so I can read it later without having to search for it. Hope you don't mind.  Hugs Ethel |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
I have read these tales time and time again, each word my heart pales because it can. The moral misses, it's plain to see. A thousand kisses? Set your love free! In the search for love, letting go is the hardest part. Your heart still shines, Catilina. *S oxox |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
I know too much about frogs, my friend. Kicked more than a few off my lilypad. Now there is one who I thought had prince potential...nah...he too is a frog. I am so sorry. I guess it wouldn't help to tell you there are more frogs in your pond that may indeed have prince potential? A great write. Patricia |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Sandra, you are indeed a princess...keep trying for your prince  |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
 A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Sandra...I REALLY enjoyed reading this. It's so good to have you posting again. You were missed. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
*sigh* Hugs, I understand that one all too well. Beautifully expressed |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Come now...no frog is worthy of making a woman become unhappily ever after...I agree with Martie...forget the prince and look for a real man worthy of your affections...we all have been granted more than one chance for happiness...James [This message has been edited by JamesMichael (07-12-2003 04:42 PM).] |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Love the idea and how you developed it. Really beautiful poem ... when the magic is gone no kisses will do the trick ... Love and hugs. Margherita |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Just a great write all around always nice to see you posting |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Sandra It's so nice to be able to read your words again and I really enjoyed this, even though it had a sad ending. I hope all is well with you. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
isn't this ironic, but so very cleverly wrote. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
delightfully re-told fairytale good to see you posting again, Sandra |
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VOE Member
since 2003-07-10
Posts 119From the land of Camelot |
As a lover of fairy tales, I thoroughly enjoyed the journey through your thoughts here! Don't retract your kisses, as you never know which frog is really your Prince! I speak from the Voice Of Experience |
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