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Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2003-07-09 08:40 PM

The winds blow hot
on life’s window, turning streaks
of dew to dusty rivers.

Rustling dry leaves in swirls upon
the parched earth, swirling, whirling
as uncertainty rolls the tumbleweeds
tumble....

In the distance,   rolling thunder jumps
the cloud laden sky as determination falls
onto the earth in tear born droplets.

Will the winds change from gusty hot,
parching the skin of a smile gone?  Can
the prints of man in wearied walk
remain unwavering across the dunes of
turbulent time?

Sands sift the hourglass of wait as the
set of jowl gnashes.    And worries wane
the setting sun upon the soul wrenching
sigh of day’s end

Until tomorrow’s knell upon the bell
of life’s trials..

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

1 posted 2003-07-09 08:44 PM

well though n written,,,

A voice of honesty
   is treasured
more than voices
   of flattery
      QjQ

Patricia
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since 2003-04-06

Posts 2160
Missouri

2 posted 2003-07-09 09:10 PM

Will the winds change from gusty hot,
parching the skin of a smile gone?  Can
the prints of man in wearied walk
remain unwavering across the dunes of
turbulent time?

Yes.  All I can think of is: "All things are possible through He who strengthens me."  Several Bible verses (although I cannot quote word for word) come to mind in response to this verse.  One is my favorite...it is Matthew..."Do Not Worry"-"Who by worry can add one more day to his life."

Now, I may have misinterpreted this piece to the point that these verses are not applicable.  However, after my fifth read, I still had the same feeling.  So, please forgive me.

Lovely verse...your images are spectacular.

Patricia
P.S. Barry, I sent you an e-mail...I'd really like your opinion on a verse.  If you get the chance. Thanks!

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

3 posted 2003-07-09 09:41 PM

It is often most difficult to be patient when time holds the cards, and the wheel has spun us to the bottom in it's mighty roll.
Take heart, for there is only one way to go...UP. TD

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

4 posted 2003-07-09 09:41 PM

Fantastic writing few write images as vividly as you can Barry

inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

5 posted 2003-07-09 09:43 PM

excellent perspective on the ride we all are captive on

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

6 posted 2003-07-09 10:14 PM

--and when we rise, it starts all over again!

Around and around and around we go...

Fine poem from a fine pen!

Huggums,
EA

scorpio
Member Ascendant

since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

7 posted 2003-07-09 10:18 PM

I love the images you've created in this write, Barry..

believe in what your heart feels...

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

8 posted 2003-07-09 10:31 PM

Sands sift the hourglass of wait as the
set of jowl gnashes. And worries wane
the setting sun upon the soul wrenching
sigh of day’s end

Until tomorrow’s knell upon the bell
of life’s trials..

Oh, Barry....just oh!!

"If I know there's no possible way I can change something....I push it to the back room
in my mind & slam the door on it." Gary~ Heart hugs, Ethel

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

9 posted 2003-07-09 10:53 PM

This is bleak. Bleak. I like it.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

10 posted 2003-07-10 04:39 PM

Bump
Excellent write. TD

Jennis#1
Member

since 2003-07-08

Posts 112
IL, Usa

11 posted 2003-07-10 04:40 PM

Great piece.
keep on posting more poems.

Goodknight
Member Elite

since 2002-06-15

Posts 2386
Ohio, USA

12 posted 2003-07-10 05:29 PM

great writng Barry - enjoyed reading this - Paul

Ivy Rose
Senior Member

since 2001-12-29

Posts 1300
MA, USA

13 posted 2003-07-10 07:22 PM

Magnus...I like this poem for many reasons; but I think this speaks so honestly of what each one of us face. Time is no respecter of persons. It just seems to keep rolling on; taking with it some little piece of ourselves. Great poem though, Magnus. TRULY-

***Ivy Rose

NewEnglandlazurlu
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since 2002-01-04

Posts 7470
A Mountain Paradise

14 posted 2003-07-10 07:32 PM

Barry, I have missed reading your poems and glad you were on top when I logged in.

This is so vivid and the imagery wonderful. You are such a talented writer.

Hugs, Marti

Martie

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

15 posted 2003-07-10 07:34 PM

Barry....I understand this, have felt it...and you write it so well...I thank you for that. Hugs, dear one!

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

16 posted 2003-07-10 07:35 PM

Barry...this is wonderful.
Love the words..love the imagery.
Excellent, my friend!
Hugs,
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

17 posted 2003-07-11 10:43 AM

The winds blow hot
on life’s window, turning streaks
of dew to dusty rivers.

Such vivid images... I like this excellent write very much. *S*

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