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Laundry day |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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It’s Sunday Laundry day The day I take hard working clothes Out for a bit of recreation Treating them to coin-operated amusement rides And while they enjoy their day off I set about mine In the Sports Bar next door With an open bottle and an open notebook And “The Rolling Stones” Pouring freely through my headphones “When the wind blows, and the rain feels cold” Adding my own soundtrack to the several TVs Each displaying its own frenetic flicker Of pitched contests, pitched balls and pitched ovals “In the window, there’s a face you know” “Don’t the night pass slow, don’t the night pass slow?” Letting the last track drown the college boys In acoustic strum and insistent drum “I am sleeping under strange, strange skies” and upon wakening, see the road stretch before me curving and narrow a place without season in perpetual twilight “Just another bad, bad dream” “I’m hidin’ sister, and I’m dreaming” trying to envision what lies around the next bend wondering what the pale illumination will reveal “I’m hidin’ Baby, and I’m dreamin’” “I’m just about a moonlight mile” between stark trees, dressed in blue monochromes branches bending low to usher me along “on down the road” “I’m riding down your moonlight mile” toward whatever awaits me, be it salvation or another less attractive fate “Let it go now” [This message has been edited by wranx (07-07-2003 01:59 PM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Good God, you are reading my mind . . . xxoo |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I can only hope the laundry came out as clean as the whistle for this gem... |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Sorry, but the best lines in this were written by Jagger and Richards...Damn! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Letting the last track drown the college boys In acoustic strum and insistent drum ============================ and upon wakening, see the road stretch before me curving and narrow a place without season in perpetual twilight ======================= trying to envision what lies around the next bend wondering what the pale illumination will reveal ============================== between stark trees, dressed in blue monochromes branches bending low to usher me along ============================= toward whatever awaits me, be it salvation or another less attractive fate =============================== you say "they" wrote the best lines.... I disagree...its more that "they" inspired some awesome lines in you.  Well ... OK ... but you have to wash it first. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I never could let anything go, Ed. Gotta learn that one, myself. It sure makes a house a wreck and the family album looks kinda funny with all those non-related "uncles" in there too. *weak smile* ? Loved this. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
The day I take hard working clothes Out for a bit of recreation Treating them to coin-operated amusement rides The moment I read those lines, I knew that your poem would be FAR more interesting than any washateria I've visited! *S* I like this very much, wranx... and "they" only wrote the best lines if your name is Jagger or Richards. *S* |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Treating your work clothes to coin-operated amusement rides! Brilliantly humorous and you shall forever pop into my mind whenever I pass a laundromat!  Love, Light & Laughter, EA |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
yes, Stones washed denims are the best.  Ed, you've managed to make laundry seem interesting...that's almost a miracle. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling)... well I am still smarting from getting spanked over in poetry challenge by Wind... tough crowd.... LMAO... nice work ed...and as for the best lines I too have to disagree.. |
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Gina Culliney Member
since 2003-03-08
Posts 170 |
This was a good piece of work! Well done and cunning too! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
wow, where did the poem go? my screen just shows your name....and it looks like a scissors attacked the whole post GRRR! OK. so now it suddenly re-appeared... thank goodness! because I need to be re-inspired to attack my laundry pile today [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (07-09-2003 04:27 PM).] |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
*laugh* I did my laundry years ago at a place that had a bar attached on one side and an ice cream place on the other; internal doorways for winter convenience. It was great, my clothes would spend the day with Blue Cheer and I would spend it with Wild Turkey, until the morning I had to take a service physical in pink underwear (washed a new red sweatshirt with them - it "shared" its enthusiasm for its color.) After tha I didn't drink until that last load was in the washing machine. By the way, Janet Marie got the great lines thing right on target. Thanks for sharing this poem. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
LOL at Iceman's pink underwear...and having to take a physical in them in the service???  I hope none of your undies get turn different colors, Ed. LOL I'm sorry, that tickled me. HeeHee!! I really did like your poem...especially this part... “I’m just about a moonlight mile” between stark trees, dressed in blue monochromes branches bending low to usher me along “on down the road” “I’m riding down your moonlight mile” toward whatever awaits me, be it salvation or another less attractive fate “Let it go now” Very very good.  "If I know there's no possible way I can change something....I push it to the back room |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
agreeing with everyone above here...good write, damn good |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well now between JM and icebox there is not a darn thing I can add except that I actually went to a laudromat last week (my first time!), and trust me all it inspired in me was a lot of foul language it was hot, uninteresting, and expensive, not to mention there was no bar or ice cream parlour attached. Some guys get all the luck on laundry day - or do they? Great write Ed and wear your headphones to bed will ya, so we get more of this great stuff for breakfast? |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
wranx Good thoughts, good write, good read. Our thoughts take different paths but the same destination. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
in your own world miles away awesome Ed |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...Just don't wash that Sunday notebook in your mind. Enjoyed this! |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Where do you do your laundry???? All I ever seem to attempt to drown out is the screams of several unwashed kids running and fighting... usually over my freshly folded clothes. Great job. We see the light of those |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Thanks everyone, for helping with the laundry. Seems that some stains just wont come out though.... Ed "You shouldn't be surprised at what happens next" |
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