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Too deep in my frost
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Too deep in my frost |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981
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You say my heart is numb, That I’ve grown cold Fire was never my element- I’ve been burned Too many times And I see you shiver, When I come near And you- With those frost-bitten lips You can never go back You were wrong. I was always cold I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, If you can tell me something worth fighting for -coldplay [This message has been edited by Wind (07-06-2003 04:11 PM).] |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
nicely expressed,,, A voice of honesty |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
~shivering~ You were wrong. I was always cold Liz, this is classic you. oh how you haunt me so well. this truly did give me shivers. your words are great therapy y know? into my library, again. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Liz, this is fantastic! You have a very unique way of expressing yourself..wonderful! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~If you haven't heard the sunset, |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Fire was never my element- I’ve been burned Too many times Liz those are the best lines I've read in awhile..so many of us can relate. Awesome writing!! |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
QjQ- I like to express myself, thanks Gemma- hehe, what's classic for me? free verse or...whatever it is I write? Thanks honey. Nancy- You are such a sweetheart, thanks Raph- thats one of the best replys I've heard for a while  I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Liz, I'm impressed that a young person like you can write such a raw emote. I, too, agree with Raph...those lines are excellent and hit hard. In fact, he was the one who referred me to this poem...and it's a keeper ~ Melissa Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Brr I hope you are not quite this cold. Great image. Sandra |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Liz, you do have a talent, my little friend. What makes it more amazing to me is that you have such an ability to write so deeply of something that isn't even real... Even though I don't know you personally, I have seen enough of you on here and in the discusions boards to know that you are a very warm person and have a very caring heart.  Heart hugs to you, little lady  Ethel |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
BOOM. That was my first thought after reading this. Lots of impact in a few words. And you excel at that. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Nice to see that everyone knows that this isn't real. I usualy scare the heck out of everyone I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling) you scare us all Wind... seriously..well done.. distilled into the essence of the idea and presented with a flow that captures the readers attention..holds it..and then leave them as if kicked in the gut... |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Thanks, you two Gumdrop, you little bumper And El Capitan, I like to kick em right were it hurts. I said I'm going to buy a gun and start a war, |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
ouch, dont kick me there! it hurts  Jason |
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