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A Swift Death….
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A Swift Death…. |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
The day you came in that very early redbird springing morn after the night of phone calls and imagined river searches, you, knowing that truth would hurt and that a consummated thought still stuck to you like a spilled lemonade in July you still opted for an upright approach while sitting so only your voice carried, like a pitbull of weight settling, a cannonball of child deep into my senses. It was the time of Rosemary’s baby but this would not, could not be conceived although it was and if conceived, must be birthed although stillborn. That loss of a till-death-do-part union ‘tis a morbid, melancholy thing, to be sure and sometimes I wonder, would you go away, if I could place flowers at a grave? It was a swift death of love the bandaids and time wouldn’t heal the wound but I will never forget I went into your essence knowing you would be the love that changed my life. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"It was a swift death of love the bandaids and time wouldn’t heal the wound but I will never forget I went into your essence knowing you would be the love that changed my life." Hi Deca! Good to read you here tonight. Love and marriage most certainly can and does change people... sometimes for the better, and sometimes... well..you know. Very well expressed here. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~If you haven't heard the sunset, |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
How does one write with such gentle yet fierce intensity, much less survive it?? Phew!! The steam heat surrounding your poetry is a wonderful thing Ms. Deca~ |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
That loss of a till-death-do-part union ‘tis a morbid, melancholy thing, to be sure Deca, While I was driving the other day this feeling you describe here overwhelmed me. Although I am not always sure where it comes from, I do know it rises as a lump in the back of my throat. So, I shed some tears tonight for you and for me...going to that emotional well in hopes of healing. And as for you, I will do what I know to do...you are in my prayers. Patricia |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
My GAWD what an intense write...you have such a way with words, you take the reader completely in. I felt this even though I cannot relate, but, nonetheless, I felt the pull and power in your words. Melissa Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"and sometimes I wonder, would you go away, if I could place flowers at a grave? It was a swift death of love the bandaids and time wouldn’t heal the wound but I will never forget I went into your essence knowing you would be the love that changed my life." Powerful, if painful write Deca. Excellent!  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Deca...You write with with purpose and grace on this edgey subject.  |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
My goodness Deca dear! The strength of write is awesome. Much enjoyed. Chris  "Said you'd give me light... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Your feelings are thrown like pointed arrows directly into the heart of who reads! Deca, what we seem to know that particular day, changes color like chameleons when everyday life keeps us in its grip. Powerful stunning write that touches me deeply. Love and hugs. Margherita |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW, I'm at a loss for words.. the depth.. the emotion sigh I'm keeping this. Maree fate is not just |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
oh my, this one grabbed my heartbeat intense emotional write but it's good to read you again, Decaflame |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Sometimes swiftness is best... but there is no good way. *S* I liked this intense write very much! *S* |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
so only your voice carried, like a pitbull of weight settling, a cannonball of child deep into my senses. wow. stunning write here deca. going into my library. |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Intensely written.. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"and sometimes I wonder, would you go away, if I could place flowers at a grave?" Wow! Kick in the gut kind of reading and I loved it! Susan C. |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Wow! Wow! Wow! No damn kidding to all of the outstanding comments above. Such an embittering experience with such a totally heart healed ending. You nailed it, Deca! Shenachie [This message has been edited by Bridget Shenachie (07-07-2003 10:06 PM).] |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Excellent work with imagery....you moved this with velvet gloves. A fine piece of writing and a beautiful introspection. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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