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The Copper
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The Copper |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state 
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call the penny by what it contains coppers clutter drawers now and again tell me of soft metal beaten to plates of earth bound trinkets... their worn dates of copper rings made of wire or orange hoops ablaze with fire, tell me of ductile, bi-polar courses what charges have their metal sources molded to fit firm a ring finger molded to surround digits and linger, used to clad inclined steeple roofs yet iron was chosen for horses' hoofs a metal that when laid to rust attracts a tourist trade of lust; its oxide acquires an antique value a greenish tinge marks the rustic hue... and the metal progressed down lines of men who called it copper and mined it then; call the penny by what it contains coppers fill pockets again and again... mixed with white lead, cut round or square adorned with faces to purchase needed ware; yet here was the lesser choice of Pandora's boxes a choice rebuffed by suitors or princely foxes... I call the penny by what it contains coppers fill pockets time and again. [This message has been edited by ecrivan (07-02-2003 11:55 PM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
and one left over for your thoughts... Copper does have some interesting properties. Another thoughtful write Martin.  (and psssssssst...you might wanna fix a typo in line 2 of verse two--smile? "abalze with fire" sounds kinda painful...wince and wink) Hugs you. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I second the motion -- all of them! Coppers it is....though I like Nickels five times as much.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Martin, a very good poem that makes the reader think. That's very good. I enjoyed reading.  Hugs  Ethel |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Serenity Abalze with fire..oops what a funny typo too..hehe  Ratleader, Nickel is next.. Ethyl, thanks for sharing  [This message has been edited by ecrivan (07-03-2003 12:04 AM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiles and hugs! |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
A great write! and a painfully funny typo. I will start the trend in my corner of the world. Jason |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
Have to admit when I saw the title the first thing that flashed through my mind was Cagney, "Come and get me coppers" but then a lot of strange things flash through my mind, but it doesn't prevent me from enjoying fine poetry, Enjoyed. |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Ecrivan...A most interesting write. I never thought of a copper penny in that light before. You made the whole process seem beautiful as well as practical. ***Ivy Rose |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
takes me on back to my college days, Earth Science class....yuck! We studied rocks for six weeks! Never put it to use until we went to the Smithsonian in DC...I awed my brother and then he fell asleep in front of the learning center while I looked at the rocks, malachite, moon dust and such. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Jason, provoking error..think it would be good for me to capitolize on that more often! Tim had a feeling that the thought of policemen might run through...the poem could have taken another direction  |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Ivy, delightful and not too practical is what I wanted...thank you  Passing but that was then, when you see old concepts appearing in a poem I think it refreshes the mind, no? [This message has been edited by ecrivan (07-03-2003 09:12 PM).] |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Ivy, delightful and not too practical is what I wanted...thank you Passing but that was then, when you see old concepts appearing in a poem I think it refreshes the mind, no? [This message has been edited by ecrivan (07-05-2003 04:42 PM).] |
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