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Martie

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0 posted 2003-07-02 08:10 PM

In dusty fuchsia the hill held the palm trees
as the ocean ate the sun
yes   I could hear it
a distinct slurp as it slipped like a melon
cut into a perfect wedge into a lover’s mouth

It kept on shining  this swallowed sun
on a sliver of a moon
with perfect timing
it was lit    like some slow UFO
in the western sky watching me sip chardonnay

It wasn’t until the magic diffused
and turned the moon into a moon that I recognized
the excitement in the waitress’s voice was my own
(she said that for two days now at dusk
this light appeared…her eyes were the color
of some secret)
a slivered light and more
a door

not just another Tuesday evening sunset

[This message has been edited by Martie (07-02-2003 08:24 PM).]

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1 posted 2003-07-02 08:17 PM

....and is any sunset ordinary when seen through Martie's eyes? I think not.

Welcome back -- I hope your sojourn at the shore was a good one, and it certainly looks as if it was!

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Magnus

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2 posted 2003-07-02 08:31 PM

Martie, dear lady...  thanx for another of
your impeccable portraits.  My sun has set
for the day,  though your own is not quite
there yet,  but soon it will...

Duncan
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3 posted 2003-07-02 08:49 PM

"In dusty fuchsia the hill held the palm trees
as the ocean ate the sun
yes   I could hear it
a distinct slurp as it slipped like a melon
cut into a perfect wedge into a lover’s mouth

It kept on shining  this swallowed sun
on a sliver of a moon
with perfect timing
it was lit    like some slow UFO
in the western sky watching me sip chardonnay"

LOL...I should've just quoted the whole poem, huh?  I wait for you to nail a scene Martie and damn, I loved this!!  Didn't think it was possible to describe a sunset in such a fresh way.  Certainly not, just another...

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

4 posted 2003-07-02 10:41 PM

For sure not just another sunset, this one!
Just came home from the water's edge watching ours...
Beautiful...but, now I want to come and see yours!

Your sunset sounds very special indeed.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~If you haven't heard the sunset,
you haven't been listening.~

garysgirl

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5 posted 2003-07-02 10:50 PM

Martie, I love to watch the sunset, and especially at the beach. It's the most beautiful thing. And, sweet Lady, you have described it perfectly.

Hugs

Ethel

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Sunshine

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6 posted 2003-07-02 10:55 PM

I'm glad we're both watching slivers of magic, Martie...it just brings us that much closer!

icebox
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in the shadows

7 posted 2003-07-02 11:46 PM

Thanks for the smile!

Tim
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8 posted 2003-07-03 12:05 PM

So that's it, chardonnay... either you have to have one heck of a creative mind or it must be in the chardonnay... wait a sec, I've drank chardonnay, nope, must be the creative mind... enjoyed much

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9 posted 2003-07-03 12:09 PM

Martie--you do paint so beautifully.

Your words just have such calming effect on me...thank you for this dear friend.

passing shadows
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10 posted 2003-07-03 02:15 AM

the way you see life is so descriptive, I don't know how you do it!

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

11 posted 2003-07-03 11:04 AM

In dusty fuchsia the hill held the palm trees
as the ocean ate the sun
yes I could hear it
a distinct slurp as it slipped like a melon
cut into a perfect wedge into a lover’s mouth

Martie, the scenery in this is absolutely picture perfect and so beautiful....such a wonderful painting with words you do.

LeeJ
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12 posted 2003-07-03 11:09 AM

How beautiful,,,,your words transported me there....

suthern

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13 posted 2003-07-03 02:13 PM

In dusty fuchsia the hill held the palm trees
as the ocean ate the sun

It's storming outside... so this beautiful treat is even more appreciated. *S*

Goodknight
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14 posted 2003-07-03 02:25 PM

Loved the sunset as seen through the eyes and spirit of your words - welcome back - Paul

mirror man
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15 posted 2003-07-03 08:30 PM

You've captured this moment, Martie. It's very good. Enjoy sunsets. Enjoyed this very much.

[This message has been edited by mirror man (07-03-2003 08:33 PM).]

Mysteria

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16 posted 2003-07-03 10:39 PM

Now that was definitely a "carpe' diem" kind of moment Martie, and you captured it well. However, did I ever tell you about husband #3? These lines reminded me of why I speak of him in the past tense LOL...

a distinct slurp as it slipped like a melon
cut into a perfect wedge into a lover’s mouth

Slurping is not a good habit Martie, not good at all. LOL, but in your sunset it works wonders.

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17 posted 2003-07-04 02:06 AM

.....some kinds of slurping are just fine....

...you know, like the kind when you get to the bottom of a strawberry milkshake.....

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Kit McCallum

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18 posted 2003-07-04 07:22 AM

Marti ... the visuals you capture always fill my mind with the most incredible imagery. Very much enjoyed this!

Best wishes,
/Kit

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19 posted 2003-07-04 05:18 PM

(smiles) Oh Martie, this is beautiful, sweet friend, I just love seeing how you see the sunset and sunrise in your eyes! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

Marge Tindal

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20 posted 2003-07-04 06:49 PM

Simply stunning sweet sister-of-this-heart~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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Kethry
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21 posted 2003-07-04 07:23 PM

Martie,
everything is extraordinary when seen through your eyes.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn

22 posted 2003-07-04 09:30 PM

No, Martie
Not at all...just another tuesday evening sunset.

QjQ
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23 posted 2003-07-04 09:33 PM

beautiful write,,,

A voice of honesty
   is treasured
more than voices
   of flattery
      QjQ

vandana

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24 posted 2003-07-05 09:37 AM

enjoyed

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