Open Poetry #27 |
Soul Souvenirs (Porch musings by JM and Dunc) |
Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Reduced to pure desire raw need base addiction however silver the spoon over flame failing reason there is my love for you. Exposed stripped bare nothing between the sin but skin as the distance betrays and the miles condemn there is my love for you. Denied tempted and taunted memory haunts staining my existence still, at heart's insistence there is my love for you. Bereft wanton and weary upon twilight waves leaving me then silent against the sand in spite of all there is my love for you. [This message has been edited by Duncan (07-02-2003 12:02 PM).] |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
terrific write,,, A voice of honesty |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I knew you two would pull something out that would knock me over....this is hard-hitting...and so truthful in so many ways. People will do what they will do - and we will love them through it all, it seems. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Washed over me like warm surf... and gotta grin at the opening metaphor. Reminds me of somebody I know. (or is that somebody I SHOULD know, but still don't?) make some room on that porch, you two. I'm coming over. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Exposed stripped bare nothing between the sin but skin as the distance betrays and the miles condemn there is my love for you Very, very good, you two....but I knew it would be before I opened the poem up.....since it's from two of my favorites here. Ya'll need to do more of these, ya know...... Hey, can I come join ya'll with Serenity on that porch, too??? Hugs to you both Ethel |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Jan, it looks as though you house-trained that puppy beautifully... this is a great collaboration! *S* That must be some porch... hope it's at least screened? *G* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Sure...everyone is welcome on the porch... just bring Scooby snacks for Dunc and raspberry tea for me Thanks guys for the replies.... thanks to Dunc for making me moody muse get off her duff and for the inspiration. Capt Ron? when ever you get back and see this... you'll be proud..... Dunc EDITED ME ROFL All I can feel is this distance between you and me. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Sounds like you two put more than your pens and souls together for this beauty! LOL Warm hugs to you both! EA |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Thanks ya'll!! It's a big porch...come on over!! Jams...Your moody muse is a pleasure, when she chooses to be! |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
"Exposed stripped bare nothing between the sin but skin" Anyone mind if I, uhm, borrow this? Very ninely done, you two. Ed |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Duncan & JM, You got Randy scratching his head reading this one now he's blowen smoke and here comes the fire. LOL enjoyed |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Wow...this is incredible. I am absolutely without words while my mind revisits a not so long ago time. (still shaking my head in awe) Patricia |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
LOL@Sy's reply! Wonderful write you two... But, what else would I expect from two of my fav poets? Especially love this, "Exposed stripped bare nothing between the sin but skin" Ooooh Yesssss!!! I'm headin' on over to the porch! ~Smiles & Hugs to you both!~ ~If you haven't heard the sunset, |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Duncan and Janet Marie... such a perfect touch...interjecting "there is my love for you". I think you hit the edge of heartache with this. If I bring my own chair, can I sit on the porch with you two, too? |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
In spite of it all~~ that's the best part! You two really know how to get the porch rocking! Truly, a wonderful swing to this.... Oh to be young and in love again!! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
now you did it you reduced me to sheer desire for more porch poetry |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes! more porch poetry! more! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Just popping in to say thank you to everyone for your groovy replies..glad you enjoyed our poetry from the porch... and theres plenty of room on this porch so everyone is welcome... I can say that cuz Dunc is the one who will be doing the cooking. Hope you all have a safe and wonderful Fourth of July weekend. Moths just love fireworks..so many pretty blue flames LOL Love to poetry land. thanks guys. Well ... OK ... but you have to wash it first. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
if Dunc is cooking, he already knows what I want happy weekend to all! |
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IntoTheFlames Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 92Va, USA |
You really know your stuff!! Great write!! ~*Summer*~ |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Duncan...beautiful words expressing such deeply felt emotions.. believe in what your heart feels... |
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